Sharp
my feelings are so intense
i have no middle zone
either in love or left alone
..............................
spent my life on the safe side
never took a dangerous ride
and i have never tried
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cause i know the heart of mine
so sharp like the sunshine
if you let it down never to be fine
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2007-01-20 22:58:39 · 5 answers · asked by going-to-light 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
yes, its very nice - I think you are saying that you're an extremist? But I don't understand the last line 'never to be fine'. I love poetry, your poem is very piercing- you get the impact straight away.
2007-01-20 23:06:31 · answer #1 · answered by lovely girl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hello Sharp,
I felt the poem moving quite well.
first stanza,
Second stanza...
What the blazes happened to the third stanza?
THIS stanza sounds very awkward.
Really, rewrite with thought!
It does not tie in with the rhythmn
and feel of the first two.
Be true to yourself.
2007-01-21 07:07:02 · answer #2 · answered by EpicPoem Lily 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
here is another song
nither short, nor too long,
the same wave sways by the tune,
sad, happy, but not yet immune
2007-01-21 10:53:11 · answer #3 · answered by rani 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's good.
Coz there is no pine without wine.
If you want, I can sure make you mine.
2007-01-21 07:18:29 · answer #4 · answered by scud 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey ! that sounds nice!! Bravo ! :P
2007-01-21 07:07:19 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋