this it ther rivised poem to the one earlyer?

Question

when he told her that he loved her,
she lit up inside.
when he said she was beautiful,
she wanted to butst into tears.
when he said yes to the letter she wrote,
she gave him a big kiss.
when he told her she was speical,
she was on cloud nine.
when he cheated,
she had no clue,
when he said that is was verry sorry,
she forgave him.
when he hit her,
she hid.
when he said that she was not what he wanted,
she wanted to die.
when he said that she ment nothing,
she wanted to kill him.
but insted she said this,
"remember that i did not kill me that u did."
so he looked at her and said this,
"that is somthing i am going to have to live with, and i can."
a few days later he walked past her house and saw and ambulance,
and he broke down and cried!

i hope this is better i tryed to fix the misspelled word as much as i could so i just hope this is better then the one earlyer (you won't know unless u read my first question)

Answer 1

Its way better and has no mistakes at all practically.

Answer 2

I really don't intend to be a jerk, but you do realize there is a spell checker don't you. It works really well in most cases. By the way, I like your poetry.

Answer 3

omg this is amazing. and i didnt read ur original but i dont htink there are any mistakes. wow. better than what i can write

Answer 4

this one is better