If one of your friends wrote you of this poem......?
what woukd you think, from a guy to a girl. I wrote it for a school assigment, but i was thinking of her the whole time
The One
Within the Changing of the seasons
With a cause not known to everyone
There is an underling reason
A feeling, felt for just one
An intense emotional Drain
For the one I so desire
Though felt in vain
With the feelings that takes me higher
As I sit here pondering
About how to get her back in my life
My mind will not stop wandering
To the thought of how not to seam rife
Whenever I see her, She has a smile
Knowing we will be together for a while
2007-01-19 09:27:32 · 17 answers · asked by The One 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
awww yes you should. That is soooo sweet. I want a guyfriend like that!! you wrote good you should definetly give it to her!! you never know it could end up to be the beginning of a relationship that you love!! lol ok ttyl
2007-01-19 09:36:43 · answer #1 · answered by pencil secks 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There are a couple errors, as others have said, but that's okay. It's the thought that counts, right? :) It's great and you worked hard on it. If you truly feel this way and want her to know it, go for it. I know I would feel wonderful if a guy wrote a poem about/for me. I'm sure she would be incredibly grateful and impressed. By all means, give it to her. :) Good luck.
2007-01-19 17:39:11 · answer #2 · answered by ice_sk4tes 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would definitely give it to her. that is a really good poem. That's how i got my boyfriend that I have now, by writing him a poem. He asked me later why I wrote him a poem... I simply told him that I wrote on paper what I couldn't bring myself to say in words.
2007-01-19 17:34:50 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offense but, I would change the last part. Being together for
"awhile" isn't going to impress any girl. Something like,
"Whenever I see her smile
I'm reminded she is the reason
My heart won't stop singing.
2007-01-19 21:39:06 · answer #4 · answered by Williamstown 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice... Gee wish I had someone to write me a poem from the heart
2007-01-19 17:43:54 · answer #5 · answered by lilly l 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is the most beautiful poem that I have ever read.. How does she feel about you? if you two feel the same way about each other, I would definitely give it to her. Her heart will melt.
2007-01-19 17:36:54 · answer #6 · answered by greeneyez_197531 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you sould learn to spell Poem before you go any further. My opinion I didnt like the poem couldnt make it through the whole thing. But go ahead she might act flattered
2007-01-19 17:31:00 · answer #7 · answered by **Damn its cold up here** 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
It's nice needs two more lines. Depends on how she feels about you. If you know she really likes you then give it to her. If you are not sure...don't give it to her. It will only serve as ammunition.
2007-01-19 17:32:51 · answer #8 · answered by Suu S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh! thats so cute for a boy to give to a girl give it to her immediatly she will really love it!
2007-01-19 17:41:58 · answer #9 · answered by wind it up 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you should definitely give it to her
youd regret it if you dont hun
and thats a lovely poem, shed love it
2007-01-19 17:38:45 · answer #10 · answered by answer! this 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋