neva slackin on my flow game/ when it comes to u lames and dames/my dough keeps rising like its full of yeast/nicknamed WOLVERINE, yeah im dat beast/tryna out rhyme?/u might run outta time/tryn to think up some lines/cuz flowIN?..man i been doin it/been writin' so long i run outta pen fluid/can spit that fire or dat icy cold/neva bite my tongue,lyrics stay BOLD/wanna call me out?...ill neva put u on hold/ill let you go first, then rip you to shreds/body so mangled, youll stay unknown to da fedz/werds sit in ur brain fa dayz, you might end up on medz/im so talented..did u read what i said?/lyrically inclined/born under dat water sign/its' my creativity yall pine/i would give yall lessons, but i aint dat kind...SMilE*
2007-01-19 08:08:42 · 11 answers · asked by wolvie 6 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
if you dont like my lil flow, and you SAY you dont...i would LOVE for you to write one better...IF you can that is...why be hypocritical if you, urself, cant do ANY better? right?
2007-01-19 08:14:41 · update #1
wow....im not WHITE im not from the SUBURBS....im blkfoot indian/black...and like i SAID IF YOU DONT LIKE IT, WHY R U HERE COMMENTING? OR WHERES SOMETHING THAT COULD TOP IT? DAMN...DO YALL READ THE DETAILS?
2007-01-19 08:19:50 · update #2
im a GIRL...by the way....
2007-01-19 08:52:48 · update #3
Here is some Constructive Criticism.
Sounds like you have decent cadence, but you need to switch up your patterns from simple A-B style so it doesn't get repetitive. Also, some of the punchlines are a bit corny. You set them up nicely, but leave us hanging with mediocre lines ("pen fluid"). The last thing is try not to rhyme such simple words i.e game/lames/dames. Keep workin at it though, it takes time.
Oh and I did read your whole question so you wanna hear better, I'm right here : http://www.myspace.com/skizza
2007-01-19 08:41:02 · answer #1 · answered by The Skizzanator 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it's c-rap.
BTW, if you do not want to really hear people's opinions, don't ask!! Not everyone is going to agree with you or like your stuff just to make you happy. GROW UP! If people don't like the rap genre, it does not mean they can do a "better job" than you. You posted a question on a public place and anyone can come and answer, regardless.
2007-01-19 16:17:57 · answer #2 · answered by ~MIMI~ 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Super
2007-01-19 16:13:22 · answer #3 · answered by Chewie 7 · 1⤊ 2⤋
it sounds like it came from a white boy sitting in his suburban home with a lot of time on his hands.
2007-01-19 16:15:27 · answer #4 · answered by Sue Sue2 3 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Sounds cool in my head. I would rather hear it then read it though. It isn't written like poetry so it is hard to place you know.
2007-01-19 16:12:52 · answer #5 · answered by voodoo/u/do 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
it was ok, until you started gettin all verbally abusive.
2007-01-19 16:16:39 · answer #6 · answered by Essie 6 · 2⤊ 1⤋
sucks
2007-01-19 16:14:34 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
blah blah blah
2007-01-19 16:13:19 · answer #8 · answered by mjnjtfox 6 · 2⤊ 1⤋
It's kinda dumb.
2007-01-19 16:12:45 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
you go, that's hot!
2007-01-19 16:14:16 · answer #10 · answered by Neea_Gastino 3 · 1⤊ 2⤋