I have just started writing a story and would like an opinion now, so i can know whether to quit now or not.
2007-01-18 07:14:13 · 5 answers · asked by human_hormone 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It was happening again. I struggled, as he was ripping my innocence away. He was taking my dignity and self-worth. I tried to get the knife out his hand, but ended up face to face with him as he was taking something I always regarded as only for my Steve. He was taking my soul from me...
Sunday morning, I was already eager for my date. Shaved, dressed, I sat there bored. What was going to happen? Would it work this time? The memories started to resurface. I had to. I didn’t want to, but had to. I poured the vodka in, and then added the lemonade.
I arrived at the mall, and all seemed swell. Justin seemed fun and so bubbly inside. We bought the movie tickets and headed for a breakfast at a waffle place. Sat and spoke, the usual stuff. The movie was ok, and I really just wanted to grab his leg. Something told me I shouldn’t. He said he had to leave early after the movie.
2007-01-18 07:21:03 · update #1
When I got home, a lot was on my mind. What did I do wrong? Was it a good date? Why do I have to be like this? If only i could start all over. I took the lemonade and bottle of vodka to my room, drank it all and wept my eyes out till I fell asleep.
I saw him there. He had a knife. Each moment I wanted to scream and cry at the same time. He was supposed to be a friend. Why did he?
2007-01-18 07:21:28 · update #2
Hm, well i'm basing it on my life. Basically starts from me in october, still having nightmares about being raped, becoming more distant from people. and then it was friday i found out a few new things and i changed cause of it
2007-01-18 07:27:16 · update #3
It's not that good from what you posted. Very boring. What's even happening? I suggest you not show it to anyone til you have a complete story done, show it to your teacher or a trusted adult ( i take it you are probably a young guy ) and edit it a couple times, and then submit it to a publishing company for review and help if it is good enough. There are no online websites to help you, unfortunately. Nothing that just doesn't want your money anyways. Stick to real life and real people for this kind of stuff.
2007-01-18 07:23:53 · answer #1 · answered by Eileen 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To be honest, I didn't like it (the story) that much. There wasn't enough color in the language and rather dull. In fact, I didn't understand most of it.
But maybe that's just me. Don't give up!
2007-01-18 08:13:49 · answer #2 · answered by Geekier Than Thou 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Here is a good place, but some people get a little mean sometimes, so you may or may not get honest opinions.
2007-01-18 07:20:05 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yahoo answers. unfortunately, most of the opinions are negative one.
2007-01-18 07:17:05 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
...right here?!
2007-01-18 07:17:20 · answer #5 · answered by sobrien 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋