so i judt started writing this song and im going to use it for a new demo but i have serious writers block and havent been able to finish it in like a week so if you guys wanna help me finish it that would be sweet here it is:
i see him every once in awhile
i just sit and wait for him to flash me a smile
i bet he doesn't even know my name
my favorite song,are we at all the same
i wonder if he ever thinks about me
if he opens his eyes maybe then he'l see
that we are mean't to be
together
i bet we go together like the flowers and rain
i bet we go together like a guitar and its strings
when i see him it brightens my day
his smile just takes me away
but he'll never know what we could be
if only he'd just look at me
i'm not sure if i believe in love at first sight
but the thought of him keeps me up at night
thats all i have so far so yeah<3
2007-01-17 15:26:12 · 3 answers · asked by alyse d 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
my belly is burning with thought
because you entered my mind
all because you happened to walk by
I'm trembling fast like the notes of a chord
these looping thoughts make me board
i wish oh wish my love could see
my eyes waiting for a glance
as my pen writes these rants
my mind wanders to my love removing his pants
oh how i love to dance under the sheets
but reality hits hard
as i awake in sweat
still trembling like a chord
my heart hasn't been this broke before
don't be afraid to take a chance lyrically!!!
just some ideas inspired by your poem. I am also a song writer : ). I want to hear your songs! My stuff is here, www.soundclick.com/mellophonic... my email is msi435@yahoo.com. If you need help with chord structure, melody, or lyrical ideas just drop me an email!! I'd be happy to help ; D.
2007-01-17 15:49:02 · answer #1 · answered by msi435 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I feel he's in my heart and soul
Even though he's never told me so
I wish I could make these dreams be real
and to this he sees the love I feel...
Okay.......for some reason I was humming in my head Blue October's theme to "Hate Me' when I was reading it so those few lines I thew out there probably won't jive with your tune :) Fun!
Never give up your creativity....
2007-01-17 23:35:16 · answer #2 · answered by happymonkie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
CHANGE THE WORD TO (I'M SURE): I BELIEVE IN LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT=THIS WILL GIVE YOU AWAY OUT THE OTHER DOES NOT.IN YOUR THIRD VERSE..ALSO YOU CAN RESUSE THE FIRST VERSE FOR THE THIRD AND THAT IS THE WAY IT IS BABY OR U CAN GO ON AND ON BECAUSE U DROPPED THE PART ABOUT YOUR NOT SURE-THERE COULD BE A FIRM MAYBE OUT THERE TOO?
2007-01-17 23:36:14 · answer #3 · answered by bev 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋