And without it I fail the class. Here's the paper I am doing on Reforming Welfare, I didn't get alot of time to do it and I turned it in but the teacher thought it was terrible and sent it back to me to redo, and graded a 25/100. Here's the paper...
"Reforming Welfare
Welfare reform is the changing policy to reduce dependence on welfare. Reforming welfare must be done."
Now I just need a really good thesis on that, I couldn't fit the whole paper on this.
"The ways we do the welfare reform is by making the welfare recipients work for their money. We rehabilitate them into work."
And that's the end. And I need a good Conclusion with a restatement of the Thesis. Because, obviously, my Thesis wasn't good enough.
2007-01-17 09:44:40 · 8 answers · asked by michael d 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Just answer the damn question, I don't get why the thesis was so bad.
2007-01-17 09:53:36 · update #1
A thesis has to be an argument that can be supported with evidence. So for your thesis on welfare reform, you have to put forth an argument about it that you can suppport with evidences. So by seeing what you've said above, you are arguing that welfare reform is necessary ,and that we must change the welfare policies to deter dependence by allowing the welfare recipients to work for it. Discuss more about why welfare reform should be dones other than dependence.
2007-01-17 10:08:53 · answer #1 · answered by ♥♫i♥bloo♫ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, for starters you said that welfare reform is necessary, but didn't state why. This is probably one of the biggest reasons you didn't get a good mark on it the first go around. Why do you think it needs to be reformed? What benefit would it bring to us to do this?
Ok, so you also said that if we make welfare recipients work for their money, we rehab them in to work. Great, now how to do that?
I wish you luck, this seems pretty bare bones, looks like you're going to have a long night ahead of you.
2007-01-17 09:55:42 · answer #2 · answered by AB 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you only got 25/100, more than your thesis and conclusion were bad, 75% of your paper was bad!
2007-01-17 09:50:41 · answer #3 · answered by Z-man126 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-31 09:30:49 · answer #4 · answered by nocera 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ur using reform to m uch and its very wordy
you thesis doesnt have to be one sentence, it can be 4. be clear & direct
2007-01-17 09:56:53 · answer #5 · answered by Devin 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is not really a question, hun. this is procrastinating. get busy and do the work...otherwise dont compain about your grade.
2007-01-17 09:49:25 · answer #6 · answered by outofmymind 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Have fun in summer school.
2007-01-17 09:50:49 · answer #7 · answered by Larry R 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Who cares, why are you doing it so late. DOES IT AFFECT ME IF YOU FAIL YOURRRR CLASS?
2007-01-17 09:52:24 · answer #8 · answered by Halle Berry 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋