As Elie’s Cabbala teacher, Moshe the Beadle discusses with him complex theological concepts and God’s centrality to the quest for insight.
Because my English teacher says its a fragment......
2007-01-16 17:32:11 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Unfortunately, I can not add "discussed" because essays need to be in literary present tense. :(
My essay is all turned in and graded, I just need to correct all the mistakes.
2007-01-16 17:49:30 · update #1
It is not a complete sentence, I do believe it is a fragment.
2007-01-16 17:42:02 · answer #1 · answered by Ari 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a fragment. It's late and I don't remember all the terms, ok?
Remember back in 5th or 6th grade when we had to diagram sentences (if they do that anymore). You take a long worded sentence and take out the basic part without all the descriptive phrases and extras. We'd underline the subject once and the
verb twice. Or there'd be a subject-verb-direct object or whatever.)I'm tired.) As Ellie's teacher discusses concepts with him, what happens? The sentence states that as a person was doing something but the word "as" at the beginning of the sentence implies that as such and such was happening, something else occurred. Read the sentence without the word "as" at the beginning. With "as" taken out it would be a complete sentence. (Oh, put a comma after "Beadle") I just found a grammar page. This sentence is a complex sentence with one dependent clause--"As Elie's Cabbala teacher, Moshe the Beadle, discusses with him........for insight" is a dependent clause,now you need an "indepent clause" to finish the sentence. A dependent clause alone isn't a complete sentence..it's "dependent" on another (independent)clause. An independent clause, "I swam" can stand alone. Do a search on the words "complex sentences", "grammar", and "dependent clauses"... you find examples on grammar websites. If you take out the word "as" it completely changes the sentence structure and makes it a complete sentence. sorry this was so long..
2007-01-17 05:42:58 · answer #2 · answered by Kimberly A 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is not a fragment there is a Subject Verb Object structure to this sentence.
She must have not understood 'as' in the right context'. You mean to say 'Moshe, in his capacity as Cabbala teacher discusses etc'.She must have understood it 'as'= 'while'. i.e. 'While Elie's Cabbala teacher discusses..' In that way it is a fragment.
Fragments aside, I would consider making it into three short sentences.
I am also confused as to what you mean by 'centrality to the quest for insight'
good luck.
2007-01-17 02:22:45 · answer #3 · answered by ghds 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's an unclear sentence.
However, if I'm interpreting it correctly, it's complete. "Moshe the Beadle" is the subject, and "discusses" is the verb, correct? And the sentence is supposed to be in present tense?
Your teacher probably marked it as a fragment because he didn't get the gist of it. It really needs to be rewritten--I had to read it several times before I understood it.
2007-01-17 01:41:41 · answer #4 · answered by Iris 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is NOT a fragment.
Compare the two statements:
As Joey's friend, Chandler pays his bills.
As Joey's friend, Chandler, pays his bills.
The difference lies in the comma after Chandler (or in your statement's case, Moshe the Beadle). In my first statement, Chandler is the subject of the sentence. However, in my second statement, Chandler is the direct address of Joey's friend.
Adding a comma after "Moshe the Beadle" makes the statement a fragment, which would make "Moshe the Beadle" a direct address, rather than a subject.
2007-01-17 03:38:53 · answer #5 · answered by FolkFolk 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's definately a fragment. Read it outloud and notice how it sort of just trails off at the end.
You need to get rid of the word 'As' at the start and also change 'discusses' to discussed. This will make it a complete sentence. I would also suggest a comma be placed after the word 'discussed'.
Cheers
2007-01-17 01:41:29 · answer #6 · answered by the_fatmanwalksalone 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a fragment. but if you changed discusses to discussed. There are some other grammatical errors as well; honestly it's just a confusing sentence, but changing that one word will make it complete.
2007-01-17 01:36:57 · answer #7 · answered by KSMILE 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It's not a fragment, but it could use a little re-wording because it's awkward.
2007-01-17 02:08:21 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is not a fragment. It is complete but missing something., but doesn't end with what 'insight', insight for what? That is what makes it seem fragmented.
2007-01-17 01:44:28 · answer #9 · answered by Mt ~^^~~^^~ 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
...Moshe, 'the Beadle', is discussing with him about ... and God's neutrality for the quest of ...
Hoped I've helped.
2007-01-17 01:43:39 · answer #10 · answered by wacky_racer 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋