how can i add a beginning middle and end to my story?

Question

On the way home for the weekend starts by me being in my six period class it is 3:10pm three more minutes for the bell ring and be able to go home. The bell rings as I walk out of class I see the hallways crowded with the students with smiles in there faces saying bye to each other some are even calling there parents to come and pick them up. As I walk I hear them screaming, laughing, talking about what they are going to be doing for their weekend. For me I am exited for the weekend you get time to spent with your family and get to sleep more. I walk out of school I see more students, students are now waiting for the bus waiting for their parents and making phone calls to them the students are still loud, I see security administrators outside looking for any trouble that might happen while we are leaving school. Well finally my cousin comes to pick up my cousin, my brother and I. I put on my seatbelt as my cousin is driving on my way homeI look outside the window I look up and see the sky the sky is blue with white fluffy clouds that look like cotton candy ready to be eating as we get closer to my house the clouds become different shapes and look like if they are moving as we move with the car. When we are in different streets and get different views I get to see the Hollywood sign up in the mountains I also see the Observatory I see more students waling home with their friends they are laughing fooling around with each other other students are in the bus stop waiting for the bus to pass as they are waiting they are listing to music some even read a book so they won't be bore. So I am stating to get closer to my house the streets change like you see more apartment building than houses there are not many houses by were I live I get home finally I see my building it is white and has red stairs so that you can go in by my building I see many cars that are parked I still, see the students that live by where I live I see my neighbors throwing away their thrash walking their dogs I hear cars i hear birds i hear the dogs growling I hear the wind blowing by me I hear many thing by were I live. I smell the air is not that fresh because of all the pollution done by cars yuck I want to smell fresh air for once. I go inside my building were I live i walk the hallways climb the stairs I knock my door my mom opens I scream finally the weekend time to have fun and relax for two days not think about school just think about what I am going to be doing for my weekend. That how it is when I am going home.

Answer 1

You little story sounds good but it has a lot of run on sentences. You should state a thought in one sentence. Don't use too many "and then I see" After a thought there is a period.

You can always start with, "Today is a very special day for me. It is "TGIF" , Thank God it's Friday.

Then in the middle, you can put, "At school today, my eyes cannot leave my watch, staring intently at the time and waiting for the bell to ring. As it does, I felt a weight off my shoulder, my heart skipped a beat and my head actually felt lighter. I walked out of my classroom to a hallway full with hundreds of students. They were laughing, screaming, jumping, talking with so much joy in their voices. .....

Then at the end, you can start with, "Home, home,home, at last. I can talk on the phone, call my special friend or even watch T.V. Total relaxation and comfort. Who wouldn't pay $100.00 bucks for this precious moment. .......

More or less that is what I would put in my story, "Home from School".

You really need to spell check a lot of your words. You have to make sensible sentences and add a fullstop. Do not repeat yourself too much.

For example, do not say, "So I am starting to get closer to my house the streets change like you see more apartment building than houses...." That is a run on sentence.

It should be something like this, "As I get closer and closer to my home, the streets all seem to change. There are more apartment buildings than houses. There are not too many houses in our area. I finally see the building where I live. It is white and has red stairs. There are many cars in the car park. Also, a handful of students arrive at their homes around where I live. I stand still for a moment and listened. Around me I could hear the birds chirping, the dogs growling, the cars as they speed away. I .....

You see what I mean, you should write short sweet sentences.

Good luck.

Answer 2

Not sure what you mean by adding a beginning, a middle and an ending. All your story really needs is some editing and some spell checking, but that's not what you are asking for.
Is this an assignment? If so, it would be helpful to know exactly what the assignment is. If this is simply writing for your own pleasure, you can put it in your book of 'vignettes'. That's what you call something that doesn't really have a plot in the traditional sense. A plot usually involves a problem of some sort, which brings conflict/confrontation and ends with a resolution. Your story doesn't have that, so it isn't a traditional story, but it is a very nice vignette that describes going home from school to begin the weekend.

Answer 3

This is a descriptive passage, not a story. If your assignment said to use descriptive words and phrases, well, you've done so: cotton candy clouds, for example. If your assignment said to incorporate the senses into your passage, well, you've done so (if a bit obviously): I smell the air that is not fresh; I hear them screaming, laughing.

If your assignment said you have to write a story, then you need something much more important than a beginning, middle and end--in fact, if you incorporate this very, very important element of a story, you should find that coming up with a "beginning, middle and end" is much easier. You need A CONFLICT.

There needs to be a reason to write a story. A sunny day is not a reason. Getting on the bus is not a reason. Your best friend slapping you in the face and telling you to keep away from her boyfriend--now THAT'S a reason!

That's a conflict. A conflict can take many forms, but it doesn't have to be complicated. As long as it creates friction, creates a problem, creates discomfort for a character, it's a conflict. And where there's a conflict, there's the way the conflict BEGAN, what happened as it CONTINUED (your "middle") and how it ENDED. Very quick example:

BEGINNING
I was feeling good when I got to school on Monday, even if it did mean the beginning of another lo-o-ong, boring week of school. CONFLICT>>> I couldn't believe it when Jenny came up and slapped me across the face! We'd been best friends since kindergarten. She said, "Didn't you read my text message?" Well, I hadn't. "Stay away from Jim!" she screamed.

MIDDLE
I always thought Jim was sort of a dork, myself, and I wouldn't go near him if you paid me a million bucks. I tried to tell Jenny this but she wouldn't listen. I did a little investigating, and it turned out Jim was IM'ing his buds that he thought I was hot. Jenny saw the messages and freaked. She came after me!

I went after her, then. I faced her down in the cafeteria at lunch. She was still really mad, I could tell, and I thought she might hit me again, but I was determined to play it cool. I said, very quietly and calmly, and with all the love in my voice that I have ever felt for her, "You have it wrong, Jen. I haven't done a thing. Ask Jim about it. If he's a good guy, he'll tell you the same thing. If he's a liar, he'll make me look bad. I can't help it. If you decide you want to be friends again, give me a call."

END
I didn't hear from Jenny for a couple of days, but friends told me that she was checking out Jim's story more thoroughly. Then...guess what! She came right up to me in the hall this morning and gave me a great big hug. "I was wrong," she said, "Jim's a jerk, and you're the best friend I ever had!"

That is one pathetic story, but it shows CONFLICT, CLIMAX and RESOLUTION--in other words, beginning, middle and end. Now, you've got some talent. Write your own story.

Answer 4

You need to spend some time first working on some basics. Make paragraphs, split up the story into definable parts. Make sure the parts all have a topic sentence. When you have it split up, then comes beginning, middle and end.

Try to spice up the intro with something, like a hint at what's going to happen at the end. A teaser...

The middle is where you can add details, but relevant details. Does the story have an interesting thing that happens at the end? If so, then here you can lay down the details that lead to it.

The end is where the "thing" happens. Make something up. Must be kind of a "wow" sorta thing.

When finished, run her through a spell checker, then double check for too long sentences.

Answer 5

the starting up of a sory should be an creation, like a construct up of the area and the characters, the placing, and different such information. the middle should be the beef of the tale the position the action takes position. that is the position u must have your twists and turns and different such issues to confuse the reader. also that is the position the climax might want to ensue, the position the "very last conflict" or some such concern might want to take position. the top is the position u might want to come to a decision the tale and produce it to a thorough. you should come back to a decision the unnswered questions u developed interior something else of your tale. although, if u want to go away human beings hooked and questioning, go away some issues unanswered. thats really what it ability. i had to position in writing a short tale those days for faculty and that i did somewhat properly ^-^ although, i dont somewhat like writing. 10th grade sucks ><

Answer 6

well that was a good enough story i dont think u need anything else i liked it.