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Question

A pyromanic by the name of Kit Russell lives in New York City (pre-9/11). After setting a house on fire with two people killed, Kit tells himself that he must cure his pyromania. He joins a volunteer fire department, thinking that it might cure his pyromania. Then the terroist attacks occur and Kit is called on scene and looks at this chaos and relizes (spelled wrong I know) that there is enough chaos in the world and he shouldn't add more to it and dies helping people out of the Twin Towers. How does it sound? Hardcore Opinons please I just loves thoughs.

For Courtney C's reponse I did not say he was cure but relized that he need to stop making chaos and help people and died. so he wasn't really cured....but i get what your saying.

But the pyromania is just par tof the character I can't get rid of it. I don't know. His like screwed up in the head (but really nice) until the end so he like changes and I guess that's my theme.

Answer 1

Another 9/11 story. I'm bored with them, frankly. So, for you to break this boredom and make me look at it, it has to be compelling. I do like your focus on his pathology and chaos. So, exploring his inner life could be rich, but the setting is becoming too much of a cliche for me. If you changed the setting, I might find it more interesting. But that doesn't mean it's bad. After all, look at all the novels that focus on war after WWI and WWII, particularly WWI.

Answer 2

I have seen some of your previous questions regarding your story and i would say it has come a long way and you are moving in the right direction. But i remember people saying that pyromania is not something so easily cured and i would agree. I wouldnt focus on the pyro part of it. Maybe he enjoyed playing with fire or the fire was a stupid accident and he joined the fire department to attone for his earlier actions. I think it has a lot of potential though. Good luck

Answer 3

Everything has most of the time been performed earlier than, so yeah it does. But the item is you must make it distinct, so although it is all been performed earlier than, your is unique. If you should not have twist it isn't very fascinating considering everybody can wager whats going to occur. I'm no longer announcing your twist should be like any person has a distinct energy, some thing. I do not wish to supply away all of the twist I wish to make use of in the future... So I'll supply you a simplier one. Maybe any person dies, and they do not know in the event that they had been looking to kill themselves ir if it used to be an coincidence, and possibly that any person used to be additionally worried in one of the crucial different peoples lifestyles and thats how the 2 humans met and so they would be like part siblings and best one in all them knew that they had a sibling...I do not know whatever like that. Your humans must be, like, all unique forms. Typical unnoticed woman with tons of cash, deficient hood boy, ext ext, however with somewhat whatever to lead them to stand out. People like being ready to narrate.

Answer 4

sounds good. just maybe he isn't obsessed with fire, cuz' I'd think becoming afireman might be weird, how about he accidently causes the fire to happen and istead of casuing just his house to burn, since most people in newyork live in apartments, he accidently created af ire that sent the hole complex up in flames, and he's evicted/no longer has a home and istead of diying maybe you could say that one of the firment get caught in there and die, so inorder to make it up to the fireman, he joins the firedepartment. I don't know thowing out ideas...but really good story. I like it. if it gets published, make sure you notify yahoo answers so I can purchase it in stores...sound good.

Answer 5

Tjis is avery good story I think it will go far if you get it published

Answer 6

Its good but should the main character die??Anywayz good story.Keep it up!!

Answer 7

sounds cool dude!

Answer 8

good story =)