2007-01-16 06:42:57 · 6 answers · asked by Rachelle D 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
There are days when someone says something unpleasant to you causing the event to ruin your day.
Laughter is a very powerful tool
This kind of skill can be crafted
Without a person having to go to school
You just lift up my spirits
and the wound is mended.
I can tell you have a good heart
by using your gift wisely
you are very smart
Keep letting your inner joy grow
Who knows what it could bestow?
I think you already know.
There are times when my eyes would come to tears
You came along with your silly self
and it would all disappear
I could stop
but I don't want your heart to drop
I'll save the rest for chapter two
2007-01-16 06:44:02 · update #1
You can use it, but make sure you tell them Rachelle Dorleans wrote it
If you have any contacts, give me a hollar.
2007-01-16 07:07:54 · update #2
That was good. But to give constructive criticism, the lines didn't really flow together very well. Try making two sentences that add on to each other then adding on to that subject.
2007-01-16 06:51:25 · answer #1 · answered by LizziFishie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem is an inspirational piece, very expressive. If someone needed to feel a little relief reading this poem probably would help that person smile.
2007-01-18 15:58:03 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It’s nice and uplifting but a bit clunky. You need to study your poetry formats...
2007-01-16 07:18:00 · answer #3 · answered by Ralph 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
jars a bit, does not flow well together.....tenses and mood are at war with each other...they scratch and bleed all over.
2007-01-22 04:07:16 · answer #4 · answered by flowerpet56 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats a real good poem
2007-01-23 00:59:32 · answer #5 · answered by Carlos G 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats beautiful may i use it for a certain sum1 i know?
2007-01-16 06:52:24 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋