do you like my poems?

Question

heres the first one


Running
by Leah B, 10
I run out the door, my cheeks stained with tears
the rain coming down hard, covering my body like a blanket
my bare feet hit the wet, unforgiving pavement
i run away from the familiar places, the familiar places i have known for so long
I run


The Breakup

I say hi
you say hi
i say why
you say bye
i say bye
and then i cry


You are here

You are here but also up above
You are here, next to me
you are here saying my name softly, like a birds song
you are here saying you love me
i try to touch you, but all i feel is cold air on my trembeling fingers
But you are here
You are here

Answer 1

Not bad at all. I encourage you to keep writing. Your work will only improve with time and effort.

Answer 2

They were all very good, but I especially liked the last one. Very nice and touching.....Sounds like it came from your heart. Keep it up, I look forward to reading your book of poems some day.

Answer 3

Frankly, it seems that you wrote a paragraph and then subsequently hit enter at the end of every sentence.

Then again, for 10, they aren't too bad.

Answer 4

yes they're good for a ten year old girl. keep writting they're some people who are much older and can't even write something as good as this. The more you write the better you write.

Answer 5

I honestly hate this poem. I have told several people this: it's generic. Where is your original voice? And your rhythm is amateurish.

Answer 6

I like your poems, a little bit.