Can someone correct this essay!! It's not a book report it's a character trait!!look out for grammer errors!!!

Question

The book So B. It by Sarah Weeks leads to a character named Heidi who doesn’t know when her birthday is or who her father is. In fact, the past of Heidi and her mother is a mystery. Heidi lives in an odd lifestyle with her mentally disabled mother and their neighbor Bernadette. Heidi always has luck, and it points her to the right direction, but Heidi wonders more about who she is, where she came from, and why is it only she and her mother. When a mysterious word comes out of her mother’s vocabulary, starts to haunt Heidi, and leads her to Liberty, New York, in search of her mother’s past and most importantly her past.
The main character Heidi shows three main characteristic eager, brave, and smart.
The character Heidi is eager. Even if Heidi doesn’t know her past, she has a lead, and she is eager to find what her mother’s past was about and most importantly her own past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she made a big decision to go out of Nevada to Hilltop home. She wanted to go to find a person named Thurman Hill to get information from an old photo Heidi had found in an old camera. Supposedly the photo was from a Christmas party that her mom was in. Another example of this trait occurs when Heidi made a phone call to Greyhound from a phone booth that was outside, and she found out two important things. One, was that it cost $313 for a round-trip ticket to Liberty to Liberty, New York, and two, she had to be fifteen years or older to travel across the country by herself. Heidi decided to get her money from a slot machine since she knew she had a lot of luck through her life. A quote from the story reveals this trait clearly, “You think I’ll forget about soof and Hilltop and all the rest of it, you want me to forget, but I won’t. If I do, I’ll end up like Mama, full of missing pieces.” Heidi’s drastic plans show how eager she is to find out why her mom keeps saying the word soof, and also what the photograph has to do with the word. And so, Heidi is an eager character.
The character Heidi is brave. When she finds old photographs of her mom at a Christmas party, she’s brave enough to go on a cross-country journey by herself from Nevada to Liberty, New York on a bus. This shows that the character is brave because she has the courage to do something that no twelve years old could do. Heidi had never been to New York and never traveled alone. Heidi said to herself that she would have to go to New York no matter what. This demonstrates that nothing could stop her in search of her past and also her mother’s. And so, Heidi is a brave character.
The character Heidi is smart in unique ways. Even though she’s only twelve years old she’s determined to get to liberty, New York to ask Mr. Hilltop about her mother’s past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she wants money for a bus ticket and she uses her talent in winning that money from a slot machine. Another example of this trait occurs when she wins the money and has to count the quarters so it makes $313. A thought from Heidi reveals this trait clearly, “It was early in the morning and nobody was around to pay attention, so I squat down next to the machine and counted out my winnings. Twelve hundred fifty-six quarters. One dollar more than I needed.” This demonstrates that even if Heidi didn’t have a lot of time to study she was very smart in math. And so, Heidi is a smart character.
Heidi’s eager, brave and smart through out the whole book and that makes her an exciting and hard working character. Heidi expresses emotion in every thing she says and makes the book more interesting than it already is. So B. It is such an amazing and sad book, because there is a lot of suspense going on and heartbreaking moments, and an unforgettable book.

Answer 1

Ok, when I change something I'll put it in brackets [ ] and out beside it I'll put in parenthesis ( ) why I changed it.

[In the book So B. It by Sarah Weeks there is a character named Heidi who doesn’t know when her birthday is or who her father is.] (general coherence) In fact, the past of Heidi and her mother is a mystery. Heidi lives in an odd lifestyle with her mentally disabled mother and their neighbor Bernadette. Heidi always has luck, and it points her [in] (to implies that it's leading her to a definite destination) the right direction, but Heidi wonders more about who she is, where she came from, and why [her father isn't there.] (general coherence) [Heidi's mother says a mysterious word, "soof, " that starts to haunt Heidi, and leads her to Liberty, New York, to search for answers about her and her mother's past.] (coherence and parallel structure - I think you should mention the word here so it makes sense when you say it later)
[The main character, Heidi, shows three main characteristics: eagerness, bravery, and intelligence.] (You have to set of the appositive, Heidi, with commas. You need a colon after characteristics to show that you are beginning a list. You have to change the words from their adjective form to noun form to list them as things.)
()[The words, the character, are not necessary.]Heidi is eager. Even [though] Heidi doesn’t know [anything about] her past, she has a lead, and she is eager to find [answers about her and her mother's past.] She demonstrat[ed] (Because made is past tense demonstrated has to be too. You can't change tenses in the middle of a sentence.) this characteristic when she made a big decision to go out of Nevada to Hilltop home. She wanted to go to find a person named Thurman Hill to get information from an old photo [she] (When you begin with Heidi and then say she, it reads like your are referring to two different people.) had found in an old camera. [She thought the photograph was from a Christmas party that her mother had attended.] (The sentence has to be rephrased because you can't end with a preposition.) Another [example of Heidi's eagerness occured when she made a phone call to Greyhound from [an outdoor phone booth], and she found out two important things. [The first] was that it cost $313 for a round-trip ticket to Liberty, and [the second] was that she had to be fifteen years or older to travel across the country by herself. Heidi decided to get her money from a slot machine since she knew she had a lot of luck through her life. A quote from the story reveals this trait clearly, “You think I’ll forget about soof and Hilltop and all the rest of it, you want me to forget, but I won’t. If I do, I’ll end up like Mama, full of missing pieces.” Heidi’s drastic plans show how eager she is to find out why her mom keeps saying the word soof, and [] (saying also after and is redundant) what the photograph has to do with the word. [Throughout the entire story, Heidi exhibited eargerness.](Restate without repeating)
Heidi is brave. When she finds old photographs of her mom at a Christmas party, she is brave enough to go on a cross-country journey by herself from Nevada to Liberty, New York on a bus. This shows that the character is brave because she has the courage to do something that [most people her age couldn't do.] (It's not completely impossible for a 12 year old to make it cross country.) Heidi had never been to New York and never traveled alone. Heidi said to herself that she would have to go to New York no matter what. This demonstrates that nothing could stop her in search of her past [and] her mother’s. [Heidi showed bravery by going after her goal against all odds.] (You can't begin a sentence with "and so," and you shouldn't make all of your concluding paragraphs the same.
The character Heidi [shows her intelligence] in unique ways. Even though she’s only twelve years old, she is determined to get to Liberty, New York to ask Mr. Hilltop about her mother’s past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she wants money for a bus ticket and she uses her talent [to win the] money from a slot machine. [She exhibits intelligence again] when she wins the money and has to count 313 dollar's worth of quarters. A thought from Heidi reveals this trait clearly: “It was early in the morning and nobody was around to pay attention, so I squat down next to the machine and counted out my winnings. Twelve hundred fifty-six quarters. One dollar more than I needed.” This demonstrates that even if Heidi didn’t have a lot of time to study she [had adequate math skills.] [Heidi's intelligence shows in her resourcefulness in making her way to Hilltop on her own.]
[Heidi shows eagerness, bravery, and intelligence throughout the whole book. Her traits make her an exciting protaganist.] (It's better to use nouns there. - Throughout is one word, not two. - Those traits have nothing to do with her being hard-working so that doesn't really work there. If you don't know what protaganist means, it's basically just the good guy of the story. Your teacher will appreciate the word.) Heidi expresses emotion in [everything] (one word) she says and [in doing so adds emotiong to the story.] [] (You should cut out the last sentence completely. It refers to the whole book, not the character you're dealing with. It belongs in a book report.)

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Answer 2

try this:


The book So B, by Sarah Weeks, tells the story of a character named Heidi who doesn’t know when her birthday is or who her father is. In fact, the past of Heidi and her mother is a mystery. Heidi lives an odd lifestyle with her mentally disabled mother and their neighbor Bernadette. Heidi always is lucky and this luck points her in the right direction. But, Heidi wonders more about who she is, where she came from, and why it is that there is only her and her mother. When a mysterious word comes out of her mother’s vocabulary, “soof”, it starts to haunt Heidi and leads her to Liberty, New York in search of her mother’s past and, more importantly, her own.

The main character, Heidi, shows three main characteristics. She is eager, brave and smart.

Heidi is eager. Even if Heidi doesn’t know her past, she has a lead and is eager to find out about her mother’s past and, more importantly, her own. She demonstrated this characteristic when she made the decision to go out of Nevada to Hilltop. She was looking for a person named Thurman Hill who she saw in an old photo in an old camera. Supposedly the photo was from a Christmas party that her mom went to years ago. Another example of her eagerness occurs when Heidi makes a phone call to Greyhound from a phone booth and found out two important things: (1) that it cost $313 for a round-trip ticket to Liberty, New York, and (2) she needed to be fifteen years or older to travel across the country by herself. Heidi decided to get her money from a slot machine since she knew she had a lot of luck through her life. A quote from the story reveals this trait clearly, “You think I’ll forget about soof and Hilltop and all the rest of it, you want me to forget, but I won’t. If I do, I’ll end up like Mama, full of missing pieces.” Heidi’s drastic plans show how eager she is to find out why her mom keeps saying the word soof, and also what the photograph has to do with the word. And so, Heidi is an eager character.

The character Heidi is brave. When she finds old photographs of her mom at the Christmas party, she’s brave enough to go on a cross-country journey by herself from Nevada to Liberty, New York on a bus. This shows that the character is brave because she has the courage to do something that no twelve years old could do. Heidi had never been to New York and never traveled alone. Heidi told herself that she would have to go to New York no matter what. This demonstrates that nothing could stop her search of the past. And so, Heidi is a brave character.

The character Heidi is smart in unique ways. Even though she’s only twelve years old, she’s determined to get to Liberty, New York to ask Mr. Hilltop about her mother’s past. She demonstrated how smart she was when she needed money for a bus ticket and used her talent in winning money from a slot machine. Another example of this trait occurs when she wins the money and has to count the quarters so it makes $313. A thought from Heidi reveals this trait clearly, “It was early in the morning and nobody was around to pay attention, so I squat down next to the machine and counted out my winnings. Twelve hundred fifty-six quarters was one dollar more than I needed.” This demonstrates that even if Heidi didn’t have a lot of time to study, she was very smart in math. And so, Heidi is a smart character.

Heidi is eager, brave and smart throughout the whole book. This makes her an exciting and hard-working character. Heidi expresses emotion in everything she says and does and this also makes the book interesting. So B is such an amazing and sad book because there is a lot of suspense and heartbreaking moments, and because Heidi is such an unforgettable character.

Answer 3

The book So B. It(the computer won't let me do it, but underline the title of the book) by Sarah Weeks focuses on a character named Heidi who doesn’t know when her birthday is or who her father is. In fact, the past of Heidi and her mother is a mystery. Heidi lives an odd lifestyle with her mentally disabled mother and their neighbor, Bernadette. Heidi always has luck, and it points her in the right direction, but Heidi wonders more about who she is, where she came from, and why is is only she and her mother. When a mysterious word comes out of her mother’s vocabulary and starts to haunt Heidi, it leads her to Liberty, New York, in search of her mother’s past, and more importantly, her past.
The main character, Heidi, shows three main characteristics: eargerness, intelligence, and bravery.
An example of Heidi's eagerness is that even if Heidi doesn’t know her past, she has a lead, and she is eager to find what her mother’s past was about, as well as her own past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she made a big decision to go out of Nevada to Hilltop Home. She wanted to go to find a person named Thurman Hill to get information from an old photo Heidi had found in an old camera. Supposedly the photo was from a Christmas party that her mom was in. Another example of this trait occurs when Heidi made a phone call to Greyhound from a phone booth that was outside, and she found out two important things. One, was that it cost $313 for a round-trip ticket to Liberty to Liberty, New York, and two, she had to be fifteen years or older to travel across the country by herself. Heidi decided to get her money from a slot machine since she knew she had a lot of luck through her life. A quote from the story reveals this trait clearly, “You think I’ll forget about soof and Hilltop and all the rest of it, you want me to forget, but I won’t. If I do, I’ll end up like Mama, full of missing pieces.” Heidi’s drastic plans show how eager she is to find out why her mom keeps saying the word soof, and also what the photograph has to do with the word. And so, Heidi is an eager character.
The character Heidi is brave. When she finds old photographs of her mom at a Christmas party, she’s brave enough to go on a cross-country journey by herself from Nevada to Liberty, New York on a bus. This shows that the character is brave because she has the courage to do something that no twelve years old could do. Heidi had never been to New York and never traveled alone. Heidi said to herself that she would have to go to New York no matter what. This demonstrates that nothing could stop her in search of her past and also her mother’s. And so, Heidi is a brave character.
The character Heidi is smart in unique ways. Even though she’s only twelve years old she’s determined to get to liberty, New York to ask Mr. Hilltop about her mother’s past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she wants money for a bus ticket and she uses her talent in winning that money from a slot machine. Another example of this trait occurs when she wins the money and has to count the quarters so it makes $313. A thought from Heidi reveals this trait clearly, “It was early in the morning and nobody was around to pay attention, so I squat down next to the machine and counted out my winnings. Twelve hundred fifty-six quarters. One dollar more than I needed.” This demonstrates that even if Heidi didn’t have a lot of time to study she was very smart in math. And so, Heidi is a smart character.
Heidi is eager, brave, and smart throughout the whole book and that makes her an exciting and hard-working character. Heidi expresses emotion in everything she says and makes the book more interesting than it already is. So B. It is such an amazing and sad book, because there is a lot of suspense going on and heartbreaking moments, and an unforgettable book.

Answer 4

The book So B is by Sarah Weeks. It leads to a character named Heidi who doesn’t know when her birthday is or who her father is. In fact, the past of Heidi and her mother is a mystery. Heidi lives an odd lifestyle with her mentally disabled mother and their neighbor Bernadette. Heidi always has luck and it points her to the right direction, but Heidi wonders more about who she is, where she came from, and why is it only she and her mother. When a mysterious word comes out of her mother’s vocabulary, it starts to haunt Heidi, and leads her to Liberty, New York, in search of her mother’s past and most importantly her past.
The main character Heidi shows three main characteristic eagerness, bravery, and intelligence.
The character, Heidi, is eager. Even if Heidi doesn’t know her past, she has a lead and she is eager to find what her mother’s past was about and most importantly her own past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she made a big decision to go out of Nevada to Hilltop home. She wanted to go to find a person named Thurman Hill to get information from an old photo Heidi had found in an old camera. Supposedly the photo was from a Christmas party that her mom was in. Another example of this trait occurs when Heidi made a phone call to Greyhound from a phone booth that was outside, and she found out two important things. One, was that it cost $313 for a round-trip ticket to Liberty, New York, and two, she had to be fifteen years or older to travel across the country by herself. Heidi decided to get her money from a slot machine since she knew she had a lot of luck through her life. A quote from the story reveals this trait clearly, “You think I’ll forget about soof and Hilltop and all the rest of it, you want me to forget, but I won’t. If I do, I’ll end up like Mama, full of missing pieces.” Heidi’s drastic plans show how eager. She is to find out why her mom keeps saying the word soof, and also what the photograph has to do with the word. And so, Heidi is an eager character.
The character Heidi is brave. When she finds old photographs of her mom at a Christmas party, she’s brave enough to go on a cross-country journey by herself from Nevada to Liberty, New York on a bus. This shows that the character is brave because she has the courage to do something that no twelve year old could do. Heidi had never been to New York and never traveled alone. Heidi said to herself that she would have to go to New York no matter what. This demonstrates that nothing could stop her in search of her past and also her mother’s. And so, Heidi is a brave character.
The character Heidi is smart in unique ways. Even though she’s only twelve years old she’s determined to get to Liberty, New York to ask Mr. Hilltop about her mother’s past. She demonstrates this characteristic when she wants money for a bus ticket and she uses her talent in winning that money from a slot machine. Another example of this trait occurs when she wins the money and has to count the quarters so it makes $313. A thought from Heidi reveals this trait clearly. “It was early in the morning and nobody was around to pay attention, so I squat down next to the machine and counted out my winnings. Twelve hundred fifty-six quarters. One dollar more than I needed.” This demonstrates that even if Heidi didn’t have a lot of time to study she was very smart in math. And so, Heidi is a smart character.
Heidi’s eager, brave and smart through out the whole book and that makes her an exciting and hard working character. Heidi expresses emotion in every thing she says and makes the book more interesting than it already is. So B is such an amazing and sad book, because there is a lot of suspense going on and heartbreaking moments, and an unforgettable book.

There ya go!

Answer 5

Sorry, but this is something you'll have to learn to do for yourself. If you want someone else's feedback, I'd recommend talking to your parents.

Answer 6

You first need to organizae your paragrahs. Rewrite then post it again, i'll be happy to correct grammatical errors.