hi all can u please give a honest and constuctive opinion on my poem please, no nastyness just honesty.many thanx
Sunset
We watch as the sun starts descend
I carn't believe this has to end
The thoughts of our time together
Thought you would be mine forever
I hold your hand I grip so tight
Sorrow attacks me I try to fight
I look to Ur eyes for answers not there
I even wonder for my heart u did care
My mind races to find a reason why
That our love for each other cannot die
But I fail for all I can do
Is say these simple words, I love you
You release my hand and then you sigh
This I know is when you say goodbye
You look back at me your eyes so cold
And your slender arms you do fold
I try and hope this is just a dream
But there’s no waking up so it would seem
This is the end for this I am sure
I will love you forever more
2007-01-13
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