Poor Baby Birds
Dashing through the pure blue sky
Bunch of birds flying towards the sly
They were like an angry storm
Dip to the ground as a stone
There was a nest near the place
A horrible guy was trying to chase.
Inside the nest,
Adorable babies were weeping for their mother
So they will be alive happily together
They were screaming as loud as they can
But their mom was not as strong as the man
Poor little babies waited and waited
Suddenly some bullets came
From the man who cheated
Everything became silent
The chirping of birds stopped
All of a sudden the mother came
And became incredibly shocked
The bullets tore those babies chest
And the pieces were all around
That scene was extremely painful
Which the mommy found
Heart-breaking this bird story
Made us feeling sorry
Those are happening everyday in our humanity
2007-01-13 04:03:52 · 3 answers · asked by dkhgvusdygv 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
This is the last paragraph:
The babies didn’t even know how to fly
They didn’t get chance to try
Now they are dead beside the sly
Their parents’ life became full of
Please tell me all the incorrect things and those lines which don't make sense.
Every help will be appriciated.
2007-01-13 04:05:15 · update #1
I wrote this poem.
Finding the vivid verbs and similies is not my homework. My homework is writing the poem with 5 vivid verbs and two similies.
Thats why I just want to know If I used vivid verbs and similies.
If I used them just tell me that I used 5 vivid verbs and 2 similies. Thats all I want to know.
So help.!!!!!!!!!
Please.
Don't help like the first one.
2007-01-13 04:12:16 · update #2
Dashing, dip, weeping, screaming, and tore seem pretty vivid to me.
"Like an angry storm" is the only simile I see.
Also, I like the line "But their mom was not as strong as the man."
2007-01-13 05:50:46 · answer #1 · answered by x q 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
line 1 dashing is a vivid verb
line 3 is a simile
line 4 simile
line 10 screaming vivid verb
i can't find anymore but to make one more simile on the last line you can change ''those are'' to ''as what is'' to compare the death of the chick to war.
2007-01-13 14:16:14 · answer #2 · answered by alpha mutt 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
do your own darn hw fool!!!!!!!!!!!!
2007-01-13 12:08:32 · answer #3 · answered by ♥bambii_xoxo♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋