cud u plz rate my poems?

Question

For You

Oh my gorgous you look so tired, just close your eyes and go to sleep,
I am here to take your worries,
I will cry the tears youd weep.
By morning you will feel ok and dont you worry I'll be ok,
Cause any time you need me to,
Darling I shall weep for you.


Like Snow

Your rosey smily in the night shone at me like a thousand stars,
It lit the room,
It lit my life,
Made something change and it felt right.

For once I didnt hold back
And you fell like snow into my heart,
Promised that we'd never part.

And that snow still lies there today,
A love that'll never melt away.

Answer 1

Nice. I'd say work on "showing" more and telling less. For example: don't tell me a smile "lit the room" ...instead show me how/what the room looked like because of that smile. Keep on writing :)

As you requested: 7.5 out of 10.

p.s. I really liked "...And you fell like snow into my heart" image :)

Answer 2

all 5

Answer 3

For You-6
Like Snow-9

Answer 4

Not to bad on scale of 1-10 I'de say a 5.

Answer 5

6/10.
♫

Answer 6

Wow! basically 12?! Your marvelous!! i'd supply it a 9.5. There are some misspellings, some punctuation complications, and the begining is somewhat if-y, yet established, mind-blowing POEM!!! really solid pastime, and solid success writing destiny poems!!

Answer 7

the first one's alright, but I like the second one better. It's a perfect blend of symbolism and emotion without being too confusing. On a scale of one to ten I would rate the first one 5 and the second one 8.5.

Answer 8

9 for both

Answer 9

Like Snow is better for me

Answer 10

Nice little love ditty, but you need to spell all the words correctly to elevate it to poem status.