Hi,
I have the two sentences. Can you tell me how to write them better. Are they good English sentences.
When either the server or the client is found to be unavailable, both parties shall:
•Take appropriate action to make the server/the client available again as soon as possible.
Thanks
2007-01-12 07:16:15 · 13 answers · asked by Iwanttoknow 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
i'm not entirely sure what context they're in, but as they are, they read pretty well.
2007-01-12 07:20:42 · answer #1 · answered by fozz89 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hi ... I would revise as follows:
When the server and/or the client is not available, immediate and appropriate action will be taken by {insert by whom the action will take place here} to locate their whereabouts.
Actually, it would help knowing if "both parties" include the server and/or the client or are separate people/entities. These are ambiguous sentences. Are "both parties" meaning the server and the client ... and will they be looking for each other when neither one is available? What is the context of these sentences?
In writing, short, simple, CLEAR. Always best.
Define who the "both parties" are (hopefully they are different people from the server and/or the client ... otherwise, you've got two missing people looking for each other and that can be very very confusing!!!) and you've got a winner!
Best of luck!
2007-01-12 10:17:54 · answer #2 · answered by mehs 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is this a legal sentence, or one for an essay? If they are more legal, and this is all you want to say, the sentences could be merged easily by removing the colon and the bullet point.
However, I hope this will be okay as well - but it is hard without knowing the context - what do you mean by client and server?!
Should either the server or the client be unavailable for any reason, they are to take any necessary actions to rectify the situation as soon as possible.
2007-01-12 07:27:32 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
How could I improve this Engish sentence? I have two sentences, are they good, how can I improve them? When the server or the client are found to be unavailable. Both shall, without delay, make themselves available again.
2007-01-12 09:13:08 · answer #4 · answered by philf 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Remove the second "the" from "the server/the client" and the sentences will be good English. Make "the server/client" instead.
2007-01-12 07:25:45 · answer #5 · answered by dewcoons 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Combine them into one sentence.
When either the server or the client is unavailable, both parties shall perform the appropriate steps to reestablish communication as soon as possible.
It is not your best grammatical choice to create a bullet list with just one bullet.
2007-01-12 18:44:58 · answer #6 · answered by bird_brain_88 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Take appropriate action to make the server/the client available again as soon as possible. --- Remove the word "again" because it means that they were available before but got disconnected or something.
2007-01-12 07:43:17 · answer #7 · answered by brainyluscious 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The only suggestion I would make is to remove "the" from the phrase "the server/the client"
2007-01-12 07:20:46 · answer #8 · answered by mom2rptl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if the server or client are both unavailable.appropiate action shall be taken by both parties to ensure that services are resumed on both sides
2007-01-12 07:59:56 · answer #9 · answered by magiclady2007 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
..when you can't find the server/client, make every effort to find them.
2007-01-12 07:24:53 · answer #10 · answered by chillie 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Stop asking legal questions in a forum teeming with non-lawyers.
2007-01-13 05:40:49 · answer #11 · answered by Sgt Pepper 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋