There are Things I realize everyday
Things that Show me the Way
Things that make me Say
Is there really some one up there?
Guess I will never be happy
Nothing much I can do
What I heard was true!!!
Life is a ***** and long over due
2007-01-10 08:26:37 · 6 answers · asked by PheoniX 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
Not bad. It has good rhime and no old word, things which make it factual. You rhimes with words from different categories, like in "way/say" (i.e., noun and verb); or in "do/due" (verb/conj.), elements that are pretty interesting.
Good parallelism you made on the first four lines..
Sure. Stay on the way!
About the content: it sounds like something philosophical in the area of "empiricism". Things some one realizes... what I heard was true... That means to me: what my senses get is totally existing and, therefore, true.
As I said, you're good.
Ie - B r a z i l
2007-01-10 08:53:52 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I could see why Things and Way are capitalized, but Show and Say should not, unless they are supposed to convey some other idea (which seems like nonsense because they are actions, not nouns)
2007-01-10 09:09:40 · answer #2 · answered by bo, kingpin at large 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it has a point like this for an answer
where i wrote is where they boat<
when the rainbow goes away what would that make me say
and is it another on a nother day
and if you cant find out any other way
then why try to find something else to say
BUTIGUESSEVERYONESAPPOETY
2007-01-10 09:06:30 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
mmm
ok
i guess u found a way of expressing yourself.
2007-01-10 08:35:52 · answer #4 · answered by whothatBE 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your name is phoenix, phoenix means rebirth, why don't you try to write smthing about hope???
2007-01-10 08:38:09 · answer #5 · answered by kittana! 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
~eh
2007-01-10 08:31:39 · answer #6 · answered by Ya Ya 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋