Beautiful
Though my body will die eventually
It is sacred;It is special
Those that I choose to share myself with admire me also.
I've always known gods love;
He is forgiving and will never forsake me
I may not be perfect but my imperfections define who I am
You have hurt me;abused me;molested me
But I have risen above you and your perversion
My life has meaning; my soul is immortal
I am myself
I am beautiful
2007-01-09 15:35:56 · 10 answers · asked by rladouceur17 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
WOW! That was soo meaningful. Thanks for sharing it with us. You sound amazing...
2007-01-09 16:01:21 · answer #1 · answered by sugarpacketchad 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poetry isn't about other people liking it; it's about expressing a certain emotion. A poem is meant to share a specific feeling or image with other people. Generally, the more specific a poem is, the better it is able to accomplish this. Your poem is good, but it's hard for me to feel what you want me to feel because it's a little broad. You could try using specific images to evoke the emotion you're trying to get across. Images are very effective in poetry, and the more vivid they are, the better they function.
2007-01-09 20:58:41 · answer #2 · answered by Jenn 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, it appeals to me in some way and although no masterpiece "its imperfections define what it is " - if you'll excuse the paraphrase of your own words !
2007-01-09 20:02:03 · answer #3 · answered by Lilliana 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem, is wonderful. It really makes me think about people being themselves. People not having to change anything about themselves to look beautifal. Because they know that they ARE beautifal without any changes. They are themselves, thay are beautifal.
2007-01-09 15:43:38 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I myself don't care for this poem of yours. I think it's great you're writing poetry, though, keep that up.
2007-01-09 19:38:03 · answer #5 · answered by vlad 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love your peom, it has a lot of meaning and I think that you really do love yourself with is great.
2007-01-09 15:42:10 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes
2007-01-09 15:47:25 · answer #7 · answered by Ask, and it shall be answered~ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I LOVE IT...SERIOUSLY LOVE IT.....you had me at sacred...very very clear and expressive...I do love it, good job.
2007-01-09 15:42:55 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a good poem I like it
2007-01-09 15:44:34 · answer #9 · answered by wookie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey keep it up you are OK ,,
2007-01-09 15:51:40 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋