Which is the better sentence?

Question

Say you want to tell someone you really want to work at Microsoft.

I want to work at Microsoft, in the consulting department.
I want to work at in the consulting department, at Microsoft.

Is the phrase better with the comma or without?

I want to work at Microsoft, in the consulting department.
I want to work in the consulting department, at Microsoft.

The beginning is not so important, just wondering which is the better of the 2 sentences. BTW I am looking to emphasize Microsoft a bit,

Answer 1

NO comma.

How about a little more colorful like:

I would sincerely enjoy being part of the consulting department at Microsoft, Inc.

Answer 2

to begin with, the second sentence does not need the comma.

how about this sentence:

i would really cherish the opportunity to work in Microsoft as a consultant.

or if you want to say "in the consulting department," your sentence could be as follows:

i would really appreciate the opportunity to work for Microsoft in the consulting department.

helped? :D

Answer 3

I want to work for Microsoft as a consultant.

Answer 4

Out of the two that you have listed I would go with the first one.
You could also try:
I would like to work at Mircosoft, in the consulting department.
Just changing a few words helps a lot!

Good luck

Answer 5

the second is all wrong.
I would go for

I would like to obtain employment in the consulting department at Microsoft.

Answer 6

leaser03 has the right answer. You're not asking how to apply for a job, are you? You just want to know how to say it to a friend.