what do u think??

Question

i'm an aspiring writer and want to know what you guys think of this poem i wrote a few years back! its all copyrighted... mature honest answers please... thanks for taking the time

She had been brutally beaten
The scars had created coldness in her heart
As deep as the ocean
Her heart grew stronger
The fear that she once portrayed
Had outgrown and silently made its exit
Who would have thought her peculiar ways?
Would one day become her aura
Her fountain of strength
It was no longer her pain she stood for
She now stood in the name of love
And owned it rightfully.

Answer 1

Wow its nice. Its great! HAve you posted it on any poetry sites? here is a site with some:

http://www.netpoets.com/links/

Answer 2

Speaking as a poet myself, I think your poem is *very* good. It may not have things that a prose lover would be enamoured with, but it has much heart and deep pathos.

I was a bit thrown by the placement of that question mark -- in the middle of the question instead of at the end. Could you elucidate that for me? (If you choose to)

I think it's a good poem.

Barjesse37

Answer 3

It is sufficiently adequate. Well written, but seems to lack any sense of broader figurative meaning that elevates the great poems. Perhaps I'm just partial to prose, and thus only enjoy poetry if its strengths lie in the figurative, non-literal meaning.

Answer 4

I don't really like poetry very much, but this one is good. It really is. I think it COULD use some work if you really wanted to revise it, though. (Put spaces inbetween the stanzas, for one. I had to read it three times over to get it.)

But overall, I love it!

Answer 5

wow that was deep! i thought it was really good! i have a friend who writes poetry and that sounds like his style its really well written!! great job!

Answer 6

It kinda hurtful to read