Your sweet embrace
I'll miss that the most
A tear rolls down my cheek
Who knew saying goodbye could be this painful
My voice seems to choke me
As I say "I'll miss you"
You look at me
Your blue eyes clouded with grief
There's something I've always wanted to tell you
But my voice has ran away
Your gentle gaze says everything
You want to say it too
We linger for a moment
In each other's arms
I will love you forever
I know where my heart belongs
2007-01-09 09:21:59 · 8 answers · asked by Ali B 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Yes, if you wrote this poem, you have talent and should continue to write.
2007-01-09 09:27:53 · answer #1 · answered by Alaska Angela 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not always must rhyme nevertheless it demands to hit my feelings. I feel readability of expression is most important as good. I do not love to moment bet what I'm studying approximately. I continuously seem for what I time period "poetic gemstones"within the textual content.
2016-09-03 19:11:03 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sweet and touching. It's not bad. 8/10.
2007-01-09 09:25:35 · answer #3 · answered by cats 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Put it to music. The 3rd verse "There's something I've always wanted to tell you" would make a great chorus!
2007-01-09 09:27:23 · answer #4 · answered by 'tisJustMe 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is sweet, I really liked it, I would give it about an 7.
2007-01-09 09:28:09 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
real emotions . nice
2007-01-09 09:26:10 · answer #6 · answered by StarShine G 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is sweet
2007-01-09 09:24:55 · answer #7 · answered by CASSONDRA D 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG!! it's fair
2007-01-09 09:26:02 · answer #8 · answered by Tek ~aka~Legs! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋