So, I'm writing this story about this girl and she gets abducted by aliens and comes back and is really supersmart and builds a spaceship and kills these evil aliens, but I only have two pages and they aren't very good and I need 8. SO what should I do?
2007-01-09 02:01:06 · 9 answers · asked by LuckyStarrr 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Sounds as though you've written a brilliant outline for a two hour film. A writer describes, tells, gives the reader the exact story that is in the writer's head. It might take two pages just to describe who this girl is, what she thinks, what she feels, how she sees all of this. How did she return? Did she escape? Was she released? Why did they make her smart? Did she just become smart? Once free of them, why does she want to kill them? Does she want to do this because they made her smart? I would think she would appreciate their gift! Surely she's smart enough to see that! Perhaps at the start of the story, she is faced with some large problem on Earth, for which her new found smartness corrects at the end!
What made the aliens evil? What did they want with her to begin with? HOW did they abduct her? How about a new and original way of BEING abducted rather than the good old beam of light?
How did she build a space ship? Where did she get the money to do a thing like that? Did she build it herself? From what? Did she keep it a secret? She builds an alien killing space ship and no government takes even the slightest interest in it? Where are these Aliens and how long does it take to get there? I should think that Aliens who can make people super smart instantly would be worth quite a bit. Could she take her friends in the space ship to get smart as well so they could pass school with no effort? I think you only need to think about this some more to make an extremely interesting story that could be a lot of fun to write. How about supporting characters such as a pet or a friend or a parent or relative? Wern't her parents upset when she was abducted? How did she explain her return? Did she have to talk to the Police? Answer all these questions in your story and your problem will be that it's over 8 pages. Remember, a writer describes. A writer can desribe things we cannot see such as emotions, smells, sounds, thoughts, dreams. It is the job of a writer to so well place you in the situation that you're reading about, that you identify with it and feel a part of it.
2007-01-09 02:25:16 · answer #1 · answered by James M 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
She could educate others on how to protect themselves from aliens. Maybe battle other aliens. Give flying lessons and rides to all her friends. Fly around the universe. She could wake up in her bed realizing this was just a dream. Make friends with other aliens and bring them in for show and tell. Start producing science fiction movies. Turn evil aliens into good
aliens. I hope this helps you a little.
2007-01-09 10:14:46 · answer #2 · answered by eeiryrapmetal 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Make it more descriotive. For exmaple if she kiklled to aliens you can say: "as she was walking tdown the dark cold street she noticed a a bright llight around the corner. She wasnt sure waht it was but as she got closer she remembered the light that kidnapped her. She knew that she had to do something so..... and so on and so fort. Just write out what shes thinking give details on how she kills them and how she became super smart.
2007-01-09 10:07:48 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Have her take her spaceship, discover a new planet and populate it with a new race. As time passes, citizens of earth are allowed to travel back and forth to your planet for vacations etc. Maybe your planet's atmosphere can cure cancer so earth people travel there and spend their 6 months to overcome the disease.
2007-01-09 10:07:48 · answer #4 · answered by Rod Rod Go 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Have the aliens come back to life twice as strong and have the girl have to kill them but make it twice as hard.
2007-01-09 10:05:56 · answer #5 · answered by Chris G 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Add lots of detail -- descriptions of characters, their personalities (without giving away the end or sub plots in the story) add dialog. Sounds like a good read. Write on!!!
2007-01-09 10:09:39 · answer #6 · answered by reynwater 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You could continue by sayin that she somehow got powers from these aliens and she uses them to fight other aliens that are living on earth disguised as humans.
2007-01-09 10:10:43 · answer #7 · answered by Other sheep 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
see some relative movies
2007-01-09 10:05:26 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Can you type it in here so that I can read it?
2007-01-09 10:07:37 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋