i wrote a poem for my grandma...she has cancer and it will be used after she dies, at her funeral, she asked me to write one ..so tell me what ya think...How does it sound? and Do you have any revisions?
Im lost to the world, lost to why
All I knew and all I felt
Now we must say goodbye.
Memories last from now on
Over the years, you watched me grow
And to you, I am very fond.
Im lost to the mysterious sky
Wondering if you're up there
Waiting as the days keep passing by.
Heartache comes and goes
But the everlasting relationship we had
Stays here always, for me to know.
Im lost to what use to be
Everything that was there
Now seems to fade away from me.
Standing at the floor of the sky
I reach up to your presence
Tears rush in to fill my eyes .
Im lost to where and how you are
I stand here with my heart open
Knowing now that you are not very far.
2007-01-08 12:43:24 · 21 answers · asked by sweet18apparatus 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i think its straight from the heart and to the point and u need add or delete nothing u brought tears to my eyes and im sorry about ur grandmother ill pray for her and u and aur family as well
2007-01-08 12:48:51 · answer #1 · answered by blue 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
that is absolutly beautiful. You'll do your grandma proud when it's read after she's gone. I'm sorry to hear that she has cancer. It is a wonderful poem though. It's full of heart and soul. I wouldn't change one word.
2007-01-08 12:48:54 · answer #2 · answered by enharmonicgrl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Lovely.
2007-01-08 12:48:09 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Palpable. Real.
Peace my sister. A kindness and a tranquility.
Rest well knowing others care. Some here do.
2007-01-08 13:49:53 · answer #4 · answered by JC 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hey, i think thats a beautiful poem!!
Keep ur chin up and i hope everything works out for u and ur family..
U did an excellent job...
2007-01-08 12:47:59 · answer #5 · answered by brock 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Your Grandma is a very lucky woman to have such a wonderful grandaughter like you in her life...its beautiful.
2007-01-08 12:47:39 · answer #6 · answered by ? 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It will be good the way it is as long as it comes from you. Brilliant nearly in tears
2007-01-08 12:48:47 · answer #7 · answered by Samboy 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I hope she gets cure and lives at least 30 more years.
2007-01-08 12:48:25 · answer #8 · answered by kman1830 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i love it...makes me think about my grandmother who passed...but dont just stick to this version because after the passing your true feelings might come out...and sorry to hear about your grandma
2007-01-08 12:52:29 · answer #9 · answered by Jae 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice work. I hope you and your family will make it through this tough time okay.
2007-01-08 12:49:13 · answer #10 · answered by Rei-chan 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋