Need some advice on my essay please?

Question

i have written a reflective essay, and title is "coming out of the fog."
as the title suggest,i wrote something i did not know before,and now when i adult i know it. i need to know,if the closing lines i wrote is clear to audience, if not please correct it for me or rewrite a better line.thanks in advance.
"Finally fog became clear to me;and i know rest of my journey won't be difficult, because densed fog withered away as sun shines through the clouds."

Answer 1

Finally, the fog cleared for me. I know the rest of my journey won't be difficult because the dense fog withered away as the sun shined through the clouds.


I like your writing, but you need to clean them up just a little bit more. ("densed" is not a word.)

Best of luck!

Answer 2

The sun began to shine through the clouds and the dense fog withered away. As the fog lifted, I was able to see clearly that the rest of my journey would not be difficult.

Answer 3

Finally the fog dissapeared. I now know that the rest of my journey won't be so difficult, because I have seen the sun shine through the fog I have encountered in the past.

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Answer 4

"Finally fog became clear to me; and I know THE rest of my journey WILL NOT be difficuly, because densed fog withered away as THE SUN SHINED through the clouds."

Answer 5

changed shines to shined and add a "the" before sun
it sounds pretty : )