Tears of Blood
_theanti
I lay on the grass
no realism surrounds
I drift into the stars
where pure bliss is found
But this grass now is brown
withered and dead
I see angry grey
clouds over my head
And the lost soul within me
amongst charred remains
cries out for help
drowning in my pains
And these pains they flow through me
all come out in a flood
my blade does release them
I cry tears of blood
2007-01-08 02:11:12 · 23 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
wow, that was really beautiful, we all go though that for our country don't we. hopefully this year will be different . i give it a 10/10
2007-01-08 02:28:50 · answer #1 · answered by jack jack 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful. Suicidal. Rather orthodox. Chop it a bit.
Lain on grass
Surrounded by the unreal
Drifted to stars
Found pure bliss.
Grass now browned
Withered
Clouds angry and grey
Over me and within.
Amongst charred remains
My soul long lost
Cries unheeded
Drowns in pains.
Pains that fill me
Flow like flood
As my blade i grip tight
I lose grip on life.
2007-01-08 10:42:05 · answer #2 · answered by warren 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like the author of the poem is daydreaming about a peaceful place where things are fine, but is then snapped back into a reality of depression and problems that he/she might be trying to escape from. Perhaps this person is or has undergone some form of abuse or feels gravely misunderstood and alone. Feeling in fact like a lost soul whose pain shows itself as tears of blood when the person inflicts damage to themself with a blade. Trying to cut the pain out of themselves. I hope sincerely that the person who wrote this poem realizes that there is a God! That God does love them! He has sacrificed His Son Jesus to show us that! Don't give up, have faith in prayer and in the Lord God Almighty! God's Love and Mercy are from Everlasting to Everlasting! Amen!
2007-01-08 10:23:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The poem elicits thoughts and emotion. Poetry is a verbal expression of these two things; thought and emotion. If you can add one element to it, poetry can transform the reader.
Beyond your thoughts is a Source of infinite wisdom; that is who you are. Express that through your poetry, and words will become flesh. I enjoyed your poem - because it seems to beckon for that something else; for something beyond space and time. Keep at it.
2007-01-08 10:18:38 · answer #4 · answered by Eathernet 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry to hear about the grass and your pain
I know how it feels to be alone and insane,
but you soul is not lost if it is still within
and you know this cause this poem was well written
2007-01-08 10:31:53 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Go with the flow baby, ride the wave. It's all good, but somebody is a little pissed. I see transition. Realitive earth to spiritual. Hang in there.
2007-01-08 10:16:37 · answer #6 · answered by Beavis 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very teenage girl. A bit pedestrian and lacking depth maybe.
On the plus side, rhyming can sound contrived but I think it sounds fairly natural here for the most part.
2007-01-08 10:13:43 · answer #7 · answered by Im.not.a.hero 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Mine is much better,
If I could have just one wish,
I would wish to wake up everyday
to the sound of your breath on my neck,
the warmth of your lips on my cheek,
the touch of your fingers on my skin,
and the feel of your heart beating with mine...
Knowing that I could never find that feeling
with anyone other than you.
$
2007-01-08 10:15:14 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice but sounds like your suicidal
2007-01-08 10:13:37 · answer #9 · answered by ALN 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the poem emphasizes the desperate situation of the writer he/she is into. He is burdened with so much problem that he /she thinks of committing suicide.
2007-01-08 10:17:23 · answer #10 · answered by deogracias r 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋