What do you think of this poem? :)?

Question

Out of Place (part ll)

Lies have taken so much
Some have left you numb
You hide your tears
And mask your fears with sarcastic words
Words meant to keep people away
It’s not that you want to be alone
It’s that you think the world doesn’t understand you
And you no longer care enough to conform

You deserve so much more
More than to this pain
More than to think you are alone
When you are anything but
And I know you don’t believe me
I guess I have no proof
But at least trust me when I say this
Someday you’ll find the right kind of love
Even though you think you will find none

I know you question the point sometimes
Of why you even try
Try so hard to be someone good
But in the end you get beat down
And so you wonder if you should
Just put down your sword and give up the fight
Who cares, anyway right
And you don’t realize
You see yourself with such criticizing eyes
It hurts me sometimes
And I can’t even express myself one tenth of the way you do

So forgive me for my lack of articulacy
And if I cant say everything that I want to
But remember this girl will always care for you.

Answer 1

It seems a little choppy at times. But it's pretty good. Smooth it out a little, and keep it flowing nicely. Believe me, I love poetry, but I only change my poems if I agree with the person.

Answer 2

That fits so perfectly, it doesn't have the best rhyming, and thats good, I like it...good job!

Answer 3

yeah, its good