I need help with my English?

Question

Please help check if there are any grammar, spelling or phrases mistakes, I would really appreciate that cause this is really important to me.
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From the day I was born, I watched Kaohsiung developed rapidly. No matter the people or the government of Kaohsiung, they all have lofty ideals for Kaohsiung. Because of this strong strength, Kaohsiung is improving each say and step toward to what we anticipate it to be. Being a Kaohsiung local, you have to substance yourself; let yourself to be as equally high advanced as Kaohsiung itself. Like Kaohsiung’s art museum, History museum, culture center and science museum, are all few good places to learn things. For example, in culture center, you can buy tickets to see all kinds of foreign country’s performance, or if you’re interested in art, you can go to the art museum to pay a visit to all kinds of incredible masterpieces.

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Answer 1

corrected:
From the day I was born, I watched Kaohsiung develope rapidly. The inhabitants and the government of Kaohsiung each have lofty ideals for the city. Because of this strong strength, Kaohsiung is improving each day and stepping toward what we anticipate it to be (explain here what u anticipate it to be...u need to). Being a Kaohsiung local, you have to ------- (dont use word substance...doesnt make sense) yourself; let yourself to be as equally highly advanced as Kaohsiung itself. A few places to obtain knowledge in Kaohsiung includes the art museum, history museum, culture center, and science museum. For example, at the culture center, you can buy tickets to see all kinds of foreign country’s performances, or if you’re interested in art, you can go to the art museum to visit all sorts of incredible masterpieces.

Answer 2

Proofread version:

From the day I was born, I watched Kaohsiung develop rapidly. No matter who the people are or what the government is, they all have lofty ideals for Kaohsiung. Because of this strength, Kaohsiung is improving each day and is stepping towards to what we anticipate it to be. Being a Kaohsiung local, you have to know yourself; to be as highly advanced as Kaohsiung itself. We have places like Kaohsiung’s art museum, History museum, culture center and science museum, where you can learn things. For example, in the culture center, you can buy tickets to see all kinds of performances from foreign countries--or if you’re interested in art, you can go to the art museum to visit all kinds of incredible masterpieces.

Answer 3

Ever since the day I was born, I have watched Kaohsiung develop rapidly. Both the people and their government have lofty ideals for Kaohsiung. As a result, Kaohsiung is improving each day, coming closer to what we dream it can become. Locals of Kaohsiung are adapting and improving alongside the city. Kaohsiung has many rich educational attractions: art, history, and science museums, as well as a culture center. In the culture center one can learn about many foreign countries. For those interested in art, one can visit the museum to see many masterpieces.

Answer 4

I don't know what a Kaohsiung is so I can't really help you for some of this paragraph (but from what I can tell, I think developed in the first sentence should be develop; the second sentence doesn't really make sense; in the third sentence I think you meant day instead of say, stepping instead of step, and you don't need to say "to" after toward; in the fourth sentence just say let yourself be (not to be), saying "just as highly advances as" will make more sense than equally as high ask etc.; fifth sentence history doesn't need to be capitalized, you need a comma after culture center, and you don't need a comma after science museum; for the sixth sentence, it's better not to say for example (you don't need it, and it's wordy), foreign country's performance doesn't make sense (the way it's written, you're saying the performance of foreign country, and you're not specifying which country. If you mean to say all kinds of performances of difference countries, say "all kinds of foreign countries' performances", and it sounds better to say "see all kinds of incredible masterpieces" rather than "pay a visit".

Hope I helped, and I'm not trying to be condescending, but you need to work on your grammar, so I suggest reading Sleeping Dogs Don't Lay. It's actually really entertaining (and no, I'm not an old grammar-obsessed loser; I'm in high school, one of my friends recommended it to me, and I just picked it up for no particular reason, and it ended up helping me out a lot in English).


(I know my grammar isn't entirely perfect right now, but I'm really tired at the moment so you don't need to hold it against me. The book really is helpful, and If you like, another really useful book to have (as a reference book, not for entertainment) is The Dictionary of Concise Writing.)

Answer 5

interesting article, I've listed my corrections here. choose whichever ones you like"

it should be "have watched".
and "develop" not "developed".
"despite" not "no matter".
"and" not "or"
perhaps say "despite the peoples' issues"
who is "they"?
"strong strength" is repetative".
perhaps say "Kaohsiung is improving each day and reaching for the greatness we anticipate it to have"
"substance" is incorrectly used
perhaps use "one" instead of "you". it is more formal.
"be" instead of "to be"
"superior" instead of "high advanced"
"history" not "History" (i think)
"are just a few", not "are all few"
"in the culture center"
"foreign contries' performances"

the person above me did nicely. perhaps keep all of their changes and just use the changes I wrote that the person above didn't catch. sorry if that's confusing

Answer 6

In N Z you likely have some expressions that are literally not heard elsewhere, no longer even in Australia. i'm southern English, yet become in oz..for 3 years contained in the early Seventies. Visited N Z round Auckland for some hours on the way homestead from oz..by way of sea. yet then, what's "English" English or British English? so a techniques as i'm in contact the North (of england) is yet another u . s . for language!

Answer 7

I corrected your other snippet, but I have a website that may interest you, because it is for writers. You can put your snippets up there for more technical help from experienced writers as well as grammar and spelling.

Just a thought

Answer 8

It's beautiful i like it!