i finally finished my sonnet.what do u think?

Question

The first impression is that she is shy
but looks can be deceiving
poeple are more than what meets the eye
seeing is not always beleiving

They say, "Don't judge a book by its cover"
"Things aren't always what they seem"
don't judge right away, not now, not ever
That makes me wanna scream.

On the inside she's very wild
She's not as calm as you may think
She really isn't that mild
Her mood can change in a blink.


She only reveals her true self to some,
those she's known for a long time
not to who ever may come
she could care less though because she's her own partner in crime.

Answer 1

i like it, i would make a couple of changes tho. first where you say "She really isn't that mild" (third verse) i would add the word "all" making it "She really isn't all that mild" it seems to flow better. i would also add another "long" to the "those she's known for a long time" making it " long, long time" again, flow is the key. the word in the third line of the final verse should be "whom" thus "not to WHOM ever may come" that is just a proper english correction, as you shouldn't have a word ending with a vowel before another one starting with a vowel. also, see if you can lengthen that line, it's kinda short, maybe "not to whom ever may one day come". and the last line is a little long, anyway you could shorten it? with all of the short, quick lines in this really very good sonnet, it just seems out of place, and the flow is ruined at the end of this sonnet, which is not a good taste to leave in someones mouth.maybe just get rid of "she could care less though because" and just leave "she's her own partner in crime"? just some ideas, but if you left it like it is it is still really good!!!