It's the introductory paragraph for my college application essay.
I’m almost free and able to grasp the air of the free world. I am no longer choking under the pressures of completing 50% of your grade projects, initiating unnecessary small talk and attending overrated parties. My high school career is drawing near and I’m beginning to taste the sweetness in the air that I’ve never bothered savoring before. Its unbelievable how these 4 years in High School have gone by so fast and its heart wrenching how it was nothing like Saved the by the Bell. I will miss everything about High School, including the obvious (friends), but even the petty arguments between students and teachers and the “I wish we were able to eat off campus” lunches. In the same breath, I can also say that I am ready to leave it all behind and I wish everyone would die.
2007-01-06 12:26:29 · 8 answers · asked by Joel Is Depressed 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
uhh - You are in like flint - no worries.
2007-01-06 17:37:30 · answer #1 · answered by Scar 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sebastian=HUNK Cade sounds horny too Jackson is likewise a recognition that i stumble upon appropriate Royce & Jace= gay sounding (no offense to each person with that call!) this is something about the "ce" sound on the suitable of those 2. all the others are merely accepted/in between for me. yet it truly is merely my opinion lol
2016-12-01 22:39:55 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Okay, you need to use a better style for your writing. Not just saying stuff....and try not to overdo it by using too many unnecessary adjactives or elegant words. The ending is pretty crappy for an app-essay.
What college you wanna go to?
2007-01-06 12:31:30 · answer #3 · answered by Man 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad but it gets worse in college
2007-01-06 12:30:50 · answer #4 · answered by dreamweaver021557 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really good, plum up to the end. I really hope you are kidding.
2007-01-06 12:34:49 · answer #5 · answered by kayboff 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im not sure i would wish everyone dead in my college app.
2007-01-06 12:29:27 · answer #6 · answered by idbangrobertplant 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
what's so depressing, you have your whole life ahead of you.
2007-01-06 12:30:30 · answer #7 · answered by glasgow girl 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
GOod stuff.
2007-01-06 12:29:46 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋