i wrote this can u rate it?

Question

Stone Step Stairs

The leaves are falling from their tree
The sun has gone and it's hard to see
The wind has finally caught up to me
The angels are now circling down on me

They say it's better if I closed my eyes
I know they wouldn't tell me any lies
So I ask them why were they here
They point to the golden gate and disappear

I make my way to the gate only to find it locked
I try to break in but everything is blocked
This can't be how it's suppose to be
The angles never gave me the golden key

I keep telling myself to hold strong as I fight my tears
There is nowhere to go now but down the stone step stairs
I make my way to the bottom only to come face to face eye to eye
With my innermost darkest demon waiting for me inside

give feedbacks and maybe rate out of ten if you can

Answer 1

I give you a 10!! It looks like you put in a lot of effort, and i think it could be published, like as a poem in a book, or made out of a song.
You gave me some great ideas, don't worry i won't copy you!!! JK
LOL!
Nice day, and u have nice taste!

Answer 2

9

Answer 3

I cannot put a number on your artistic expression because I believe it is necessary for a person to express himself artistically; however, that being said, I would suggest that you not use the word ME twice in the first stanza and watch your meter in the last two stanzas. Also, I would not switch verb tense in the same sentence.

Are you feeling depressed? The poem is beautiful but it is pretty dark.

Answer 4

only an 7

Answer 5

Innermost demons...who would have ever thought that they have to be dealt with...whether we chose to deal with them now, or take a chance on dealing with them later.
10...good job. There's a lot to think about here.

Answer 6

I quite like it. I do have reservations about the simplicity of the vocab used and the lack of similies etc.

On the whole a nice thought-provoking poem. 6.5/10

Answer 7

i like it very much good work and keep going i give u 10 out of 10

Answer 8

that's awesome! you sound like you often write. you should enter that on-line poetry contest. i like the way it forms a visual picture in my head. good rhyming, descent metaphors. you should try to write poetry with more "ancient", more sophisticated words. use a thesaurus for those common words and also try to use words you don't always see everyday. that makes it more interesting, but try not to make it busy.but i like your poem the way it is, just something to try and see if you like. id definitely like to read more of your poems too

Answer 9

I really like your ability to rhyme and choice of words..I give it a 9.9!! :)

Answer 10

It's good but work on ryming a little better.