I wrote something, let me know what you think?

Question

Bye Now

People come and go
And I guess I'll do the same
But I just wanted to let you know
Of all the things we almost became

It finally got to my head
Of where I should be instead
So here I am letting go of my hand
And I hope you'll understand

Trust me I know it's kind of sad
To give up on the things we had
But hey maybe it's for the best
This way my heart has a chance to rest

You can't say you didn't know
I've always been there to let it show
But hey I'm going to go now
Maybe I'll see you around now


Feedbacks or rate out of ten if you can.

Answer 1

Great song! you should send to someone to get it on the radio! 10/10 keep up the good work!

Answer 2

It's not bad, I could see it in a song, sort of emo-y but not whining, good. Think about this, though:

"So here I am letting go of my hand"

How exactly would you let go of YOUR hand? Maybe yoou'd want to use "your" instead?
Give you a 7 here - come up with a killer one-liner for the chorus (which you don't have here anyway), something that sticks immediately, and you get 11 :-)

Answer 3

Being a poet myself, I can truthfully say that this is indeed a very good poem with a well-suited title. You should continue to write.

10/10

Answer 4

I'm not used to your writing style. Its ok but it could be a little better 7 or 8/10

Answer 5

An honest 9 out of 10. I can totally relate and feel what you were writing.That was really great.

Answer 6

Its great! Very artistic! 10/10

Answer 7

i think that was very good but this line:
Of all the things we almost became
i think u should change that to
of the things we became.
there just seemed like there were 2 many sylables in the line..

i love it. id rate it an 8.5

Answer 8

I'd give you a 7.5 or 8...I find rhymed poetry a bit annoying though. And your first stanza is following a different pattern and it throws off the smoothness of the reading...

Answer 9

I would give it a 10 and a thumbs up. I love it because it is so sweetly written. Great Job!

Answer 10

10. def. here, read one of mine:

My fave poem of mine called feelings

Feelings come and go,
like wind and rain and snow.
From love to fear,
so close yet near,
like you would never know.

You could be happy,
oh so happy,
jump up and shout “Yahoo!”
but do you think
in just a blink,
that that feeling’s leaving you?

Feelings come and go,
so stop and take it slow.
Could this be the last time ever?
The world may never know.