I am having trouble with my song.U can skip some steps.
1st fill in the blanks
2nd rank each verse
1. You left me here
Left me alone
My greatest fear
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2. I never wanted it to be this way
I never want to see you again
Yet somehow I wish you stay
I wish the past had never been
3. Even though I know
I’ll never again see your face
My heart beats with woe
I have trouble keeping my pace
4. Hidden secrets I’ll never speak
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This truth of mine, it makes me weak
And I wonder if the others know
5. It feels like a part of me is gone
I feel so ******* empty without you
I wonder if this is wrong
I only dream about you
6. The world is sleeping, I’m awake
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I wonder if this makes me fake
This game of playing happy princess
7. Do you lie awake at night
Do you ever think about me
Do you think that I provide a light
The light that can set you free
8. Times have changed since I last saw you
It’s gotten harder to be who I am
Parts of me scream I’m happy now, and that’s true
And parts of me scream ****
9. There wasn’t anything to you, another kid in black
When I first saw you, I felt hate
I realized that you had my back
I realized that you were so great
10. I know I’m obsessing
But somehow I can’t stop
It makes me feel like I’m regressing
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2007-01-06 04:52:36 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Yeah, I know it's long. I need to add more to this question!!!!
I don't have a chorus, you can help me find one...
I ask that this isn't a joke, but if you REALLY want, make me laugh.
Tell me what you think.
Do I have a chance as a song writer or not???
I don't think I do =), I just had to write this song!
Okay, thanks guys, and HAVE FUN!!!!
2007-01-06 04:54:47 · update #1
Oh, and can you pick the order of the verses for me??? It jumps to much, and I am really bad at flow =)
2007-01-06 04:55:46 · update #2
OKAY READ THIS EVERYONE
Thankfully, i have filled the lyrics up
I just need a chorus, and I need to know what order to put the verses in!!!!
Just list the numbers in order, not to hard right?
and what do you think?
2007-01-06 09:16:52 · update #3
And I'm sorry I have hurt so many by making them think!
2007-01-06 09:17:41 · update #4
this is a chorus you can consider
"I am me and you are you/let's be some of those happy few/cause I love you/*pause* and we were meant to be together"
just made it up, you have to change the speed like the from "i am me" to "few" should be same rate, then "cause i love you" should be slow, then a pause, then we were meant to be together should be same speed as first 2 lines, if not a little bit faster
lyrics are cool, i like the style of rhyming
2007-01-06 09:44:09 · answer #1 · answered by Konrad 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1.) Is being alone??
4.) And i will never show?
6.) Now i sleep less?
8.) I just can't stop?
nice song.
All the verses are good like 10's.
I didn't know what to fill.
2007-01-06 13:06:20 · answer #2 · answered by Zack 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brop the Beat son
2007-01-06 17:19:31 · answer #3 · answered by Lauren 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the flow and the verses and good but i amm really no good at making these things up sorry I can't help you.
2007-01-06 13:17:53 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
What you got is good so far, but i have no idea how to help you out here kid. I am more of a science gal!
2007-01-06 19:51:46 · answer #5 · answered by Stormy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would try to help but, I would probably suck at writing a song!!! Sorry!!
Good Luck I'm sure someone on here can help you get it right!
2007-01-06 18:20:00 · answer #6 · answered by shannon h 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry!! But it's way too much to read!! Any shorter questions?
2007-01-06 18:17:59 · answer #7 · answered by senn 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'll even give you a beat.....pow chikka pow wow
wikkie wikke boom dada boom shhhhhh
1.that i had for so long
10. get out of my head,get out of my mind, yo were there before,lying lying lying.
it's over now,its done and through
now that im with no one-i'm happy im done with you
i'm better than that
i'm better than her
i'm better than you
the past is now a blur
2007-01-06 13:05:29 · answer #8 · answered by MARIA G. 4 · 7⤊ 0⤋
1 - a broken home
2007-01-06 18:13:39 · answer #9 · answered by briley4242 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, takes to much thought. It hurts my brain.
2007-01-06 17:06:53 · answer #10 · answered by Dorkboy 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋