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I am a english learner.I have written a composition.could you revise my composition?
I don't know whether it has any grammar error.
[ With the development of society, there become more and moreeducation chances for women which facilitate them to find a very good job.
However,when woman earns more than her husband,life would turn out to be really complecated. Because of this, countless couples divorced in recent years. As for man, he would feel lose face when his wife earns more than him, and this would bring him great pressure from both outside and himself. As a result, it always ends up as an explosion when the pressure accumulate into certain limit.
In my opinion, it's very common that woman earns more than her husband,the key point is to keep a positive attitude and deal with the matter properly, which would ensure a harmonious perfect life. ]

Thanks a lot!

Answer 1

Yeah it needs a little work:: Try it this way>
Woman have more chances for a better education with the development of society. This facilitates they being able to find much better and higher paying jobs than before. This has presented a new set of problems in relationships.

When women earn more than their husbands whole new sets of problems emerge which complicates the relationship. The man he feels like he is losing face, because his wife earns more money than he does. This has been one of the main causes for the countless divorces in recent years.

In my opinion when a woman earns more than her husband the key point it to deal with the impending possible problems early with a positive attitude.

Try rewording it to something more along those lines. Good luck and keep after it.