Would you read a short story (about 25 pages) wriitten by a 12-13 year old if it used proper grammer etc?

Question

I just wrote a book and published it, but I want your opinion on the preveiw http://www.lulu.com/browse/search.php?search_forum=-1&search_cat=-1&show_results=topics&return_chars=200&search_keywords=&keys=&fSearch=true+evil+never+dies&fSearchFamily=0

It was automaticy priced, I only get 4 dollars! Theres the paperback, and download version. It cost 5 dollars to print, then 1$ goes to lulu.com and I end up only making a few dollars, its not my fault its so expensive, and just so you know, I used a word edditing program and it automaticly made the word posseses or whatever into poses, for some reason the word isn't in the built in dictionary.

It was automaticy priced, I only get 4 dollars! Theres the paperback, and download version. It cost 5 dollars to print, then 1$ goes to lulu.com and I end up only making a few dollars, its not my fault its so expensive, and just so you know, I used a word edditing program and it automaticly made the word posseses or whatever into poses, for some reason the word isn't in the built in dictionary.
And actually I do have a Stephen king type extra short story, and it sounds os much better then this one, but I lost the paper.

Now I lowered the price a hair and I only get 3 DOLLARS NOW. the rest of it goes to printing and lulu.com

Answer 1

No, I probably wouldn't pay to read it, but I would read it for free. It's too short to pay that much.
I'd delete the side note you put in there, it doesn't need to be there and sounds like you are selling your work short.
A note about some grammar and spelling issues. Here's what you wrote:

Ezrayahs life has aways been strange, from constantly moving, strange tainted memories, to her parents disappearing unexpectedly at her birthday party. Then she begans to discover a power she posseses. Suddenly a strange women begins to stalk her and visits her in visions of the past and the future. And somehow, her mother has something to do with all of this and apparently caused all of this. Could this strange women/stalker have something to do with her parents disappearence?


First off it should be Ezrayah's life, not Ezrayahs. I would put a semi colon after strange since you are beginning a new thought. Oh wait let me just correct the whole thing, here:

Ezrayah's life has aways been strange; from the constant moving, to her strangely tainted memories, to her parents disappearing unexpectedly at her birthday party, but then she begins to discover a power she never knew she had. Suddenly, a strange women begins to stalk her and visits her in visions that hint of the past and the future. Ezrayah knows that somehow her mother is involved and might even be the cause! Could this strange women have something to do with her parents disappearance, or worse?

If you're willing to email me the book I will make further corrections/suggestions. I applaud your attempt and encourage you to keep it up. Your writing will improve the more you do it.

Answer 2

I don't think your book is too expensive. I mean, your right, it's not your fault that the book got automatically jacked up in price. So I will buy a book tomorrow morning. :) I hope you get some encouragement from me and others buying your book.

It is inspirational to me to see a 13 yr old publishing a book, when me, a 17 yr has somewhat ran out of my imagination. You just jump started my writing skills again, and I will be sending you one of my stories soon. :)

Have fun and keep up the excellent work!

Best Wishes in 2007,
Shelley

Answer 3

I wouldn't pay to read a story that is only 25 pages, even if it were written by a professional. I can get a whole darn novel at the used book store for a buck.

Answer 4

Right off the description ---' a power she poses how about a power she 'possesses'?

Major turnoff....get someone to proof it.

And I pay 4.50 for James Patterson ebooks...why should I pay what was it $5.63 for your ebook? Too much!

The plot does sound interesting though. Keep at it...you may be the next steven King.

Answer 5

I would read it if it was free but a 25-page book just isn't worth such a high price. I understand your dilemma but you need to understand our position too. Some of us just don't have money to burn.

Answer 6

ya why not i will do it.because they has the fresh ideas and a we can learn to view things in a new way or in thier way.

Answer 7

Sure why not?