how ya like my poems?

Question

"She"
She, the one you never seein the daytime
She, her arms glittering in the moonlight
She, her legs leaping in the dark, night air
She, dancing in the city jungle

heres the second one, its very different

The Breakup
i say hi
you say hi
i say why
you say bye
i say bye
and then i cry

the third one wich is sad...

You are here

you are here, even though your gone
you are here but also up above
you are here next to me
you are here saying my name
you are here saying you love me
you are here saying you care about me
i try to touch you, but all i feel is air on my trembeling fingers
but you are here
you are here


and the last...

Love

love is a big blue river that never dries out
love is white pure snow, sweet and inncocent
love is a big yellow sun shining down on you, it is fun
love is big high mountains, when you look at them you get a shiver down your spine
love is in the home, in the head and in the heart
love is everywhere

i am 10 years old and i want to be a writer

heres some more
"running"
i run out the door, my cheeks stained with tears my bare feet slapping the pavement, the rain coming down in a thick sheet, like a blanket covering my body
i am running away, from the familiar place, and the familiar faces that i have been with so long
i run to be free, i run to get away, i run just to feel the wind on my face
i run

Answer 1

they're beautiful. write with passion and love, and you'll get there, you are a very special person. I belive in you.

Answer 2

i think they are great keep working at it and i think you will be the future famous poet


the love poem, i think that where it says love is big high mountains when you look at then you get a shiver you could change it to love is big high mountains you can look up to it and know that it is almost impossible for it to break down and fall apart on you but don't use if you don't like it

i LOVED them i think im seeing the future poet right now 10 years ffrom now congrats!

Answer 3

I say we need to look out for you in another 10 years... you've got great potential. Keep up the good work and don't stop dreaming.

Answer 4

# 2 is good it can be a song. (I ilike ryme)
The others are not really that good but don't take that in a bad way. Keep trying (writing) and you will get better you have potential just keep writing them every day.

Answer 5

I think your poetry shows potential. I encourage you to keep at it adn share with others for their input. Good Luck to you!

Answer 6

CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!!

Yours are some of the only poems I have actually read, and liked.

Seriously. I am a major poetry-hater.

so good job, and I liked them, and actually knew what you were talking about and what you feel and stuff.