Read my peom and tell me is it good or poor ? and plz thell me what changes i have to do in this poem?

Question

LIFE IS LONG
LESS THAN DEATH
YOU WILL FIND AFTER DEATH
WE ARE SOIL
SO, WILL GO ON SOIL
WILL GO IN SOIL
YOU HAVE TIME YET
SO, DO YOUR BEST
TELL THE WORLD, WHO ARE YOU
IF YOU WANT THEY REMEMBER YOU
DO THOSE THINGS WHICH OTHER'S CAN'T DO
THINK FOR OTHERS
DO FOR THEM
WHICH THEY CAN'T THINK
WHICH THEY CAN'T DO
HELP OTHERS YOU WILL NOT DIE
YOU WILL DIE BUT YOUR NAME WILL ALIVE
(GOHAR SHAH)

Answer 1

its good, no great but it needs a heading like LIFE or YOU HAVE TIME YET and i think you repeated a line twice
We ARE SOIL
SO, WILL GO ON SOIL
WILL GO ON SOIL <<<<<< i would change this line but its up to you

Answer 2

For a poem written in blank verse it's not bad. Your concept and ideas are good ; however, there is some areas with poor arranging and lack of clarity. Try reading to yourself at least three more times, brainstorm, rearrange and rewrite.

Answer 3

It is a good idea in concept, but lacks good execution. First, in order to make it even readable try NOT TO RIGHT EVERYTHING IN CAPS!!! That is annoying and sloppy. Second, try to use less abrasive words. Try to let the poetry flow.
Try writing it a few more times. :)

Answer 4

Capitalization and punctuation should be used for a means to a vision. Think about how you want the reader to feel, see, hear, taste, smell and so on.

Answer 5

Yawn. not something imaginative. not something evocative of nostalgia. not even an exciting line destroy. there is not any power to the language. there is not something controlling the %. different than all those end-stopped line breaks. Yawn.

Answer 6

yeah its a good poem but i dont like that soil part and
HELP OTHERS YOU WILL NOT DIE i dont really like that die part. might wanna change those. but everything else is good!!!

Answer 7

interesting concept.Your point of view is from the soil.keep digging.