Please tell me your opinion of this song I wrote, tell me if it's good, really good, or just not that great, or maybe it's good enough to be on a cd, what do ya think? ( the first stanza is verse, the next is chorus, and the one after that is verse also..
I Got a Plan
Baby do you know the dreams I have for you
Baby do you know I plan to make them all come true
Baby I can see the future in my mind
Never give up, it will just take some time
I got a plan
To make everything all right
I got a plan
I’m gonna make you happy
I got a plan
To make all your dreams real
I got a plan
Will you please take my hand?
Baby I know I’m not perfect but I’m doin my best
You’ll soon see I’m for real but time is the test
I really want this to last, everything we feel
Baby it won’t be long you’ll soon see I’m for real
This song took about 2 days to write
2007-01-04 18:12:27 · 16 answers · asked by James J 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
yea its ok...u need more verses..and a beat to go wit it and yull have a good one
2007-01-04 18:14:53 · answer #1 · answered by {BUBBLICIOUSZ}♥MUAH! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Reads like one of those quasi - R&B songs with half-naked ghetto girls and little gay singers who act all macho but squeal just a bit too much for heterosexuals. It's a dead stereotype but that's what the audience who likes such squealing would buy, so give it a shot.
2007-01-04 18:16:47 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sucks
2007-01-04 18:13:52 · answer #3 · answered by texrad 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its better then a lot of people can do (like me) but it still needs some work like you can add to it, or make it less repetetive, but othere then the that id give it a b-
2007-01-04 18:22:01 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry it's too cheesy change the baby bit your using it too often a different word would sound better, also too much I got a plan.
I think it would sound great then !!
2007-01-04 18:19:10 · answer #5 · answered by Anthony B 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Maybe you should try this one:
I write the songs that make the whole world puke.
I write the songs that overflow the toilet.
I write the songs that make you wish you were nuked.
I write the songs, I write the songs.
2007-01-04 18:15:59 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
o, did u just read my earlier response? if u did, cool, i still lk the song! (if not, i guess i'm just really clueless & didn't read how long it took u 2 write it, or u posted the same thing 2wice!) (wow, that was long!)
2007-01-04 18:15:59 · answer #7 · answered by Hallie R 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's ok the flow of it is a little off and its not rly in depth but it isnt awful
2007-01-04 18:15:36 · answer #8 · answered by xxkris12xx 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is great but you should not post this for others to copy. I would remove it FAST! It is GREAT!
2007-01-04 18:14:35 · answer #9 · answered by MG 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if you havent copywrote that, its not wise to post it all over the internet. especially if u think it is good!
2007-01-04 18:14:20 · answer #10 · answered by little b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋