Here I poem I finnished today. Pls give me your comments
Stand alone is the scattered crowd
DO NOT fight your inner self,
Welcome it in a balance of control.
Stand not alone with ones heart,
Hear the loud words of your soul.
DO NOT look into those lifeless eyes,
Keep your feet firmly of that shameless law.
Where time does not stand still,
But you can’t admit your cowardly flaw.
SAD to know that this pain caused,
Came from a place of external hatred.
Not your own but that of the voices,
your soul to them, not at all sacred.
WHERE are those you shed blood for?
Only the Shadows of the dead remain.
Gone are the intriguing crowds.
Alone are your thoughts of misery and shame.
WAS it worth it all?
-Written by Tammy Marshall
04/01/2007
2007-01-03 20:05:57 · 6 answers · asked by diarubie 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Its wonderful ,i like it so much,do not fight ur inner self
welcome it in a balance of control
its WOW
2007-01-03 20:15:57 · answer #1 · answered by behnoush_k_1976 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very deep
2007-01-03 20:10:19 · answer #2 · answered by Fuzzy Wuzzy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was alright, it would be better if the first words of each verse werent in caps though. but good job
2007-01-03 20:11:33 · answer #3 · answered by rawrrrr 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's marvelous... deep thoughts yet interesting
2007-01-03 20:13:30 · answer #4 · answered by 2D1iLuV 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, it is an interesting thinking !!!
2007-01-03 20:10:41 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
too long. forget that
2007-01-03 20:11:04 · answer #6 · answered by ace 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋