O.k so i want my character "Danny" to meet with Jesus or even God (i know is kind of weird) and to learn some kind of religious lesson which will change his life...any suggestions?
"In his dream he saw his mother taking him to the orphanage, he saw himself lonely in the corner of a room, he saw himself using drugs, he saw himself escaping, he saw himself with his gang members, and he saw himself getting shot in the head. At the same time he saw that there was a skull in the sky watching over him. He realized that it was the devil itself laughing at him. 'You can not escape' the evil skull told..."
2007-01-03 11:15:49 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
...also does this seem 12th grade writing?
2007-01-03 11:30:11 · update #1
The evil skull told him. Just as those words has been spoken, an electric discharged crackled through the air, revealing a white nimbus of light. From the amorphous cloud of light there echoed a voice, quite pure and sonorous in tone, which stated firmly "You can escape, my son, accept Me into your heart."
2007-01-03 11:19:25 · answer #1 · answered by slowlygrowing 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You know better than we do where you want your story to go, but I can say that the story will be more entertaining if Danny's meeting with Jesus produces a lesson that is not what most people would expect. Go for the unexpected, and you'll usually have a winner.
2007-01-03 11:21:07 · answer #2 · answered by robertspraguejr 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hope this is a rough outline of the story and not a real paragraph from it. Each sentence in your paragraph should be its own paragraph... meaning that each thing he sees should be described separately to make for an interesting read.
If you want him to meet God after he sees the devil himself laughing...have him turn and run, except that he runs smack into himself...the perfect him that his life couldve been, except that this is God.
Have fun.
2007-01-03 11:20:50 · answer #3 · answered by leahivan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would put that the devil laughed, and Jesus came to the rescue.
2007-01-03 11:18:15 · answer #4 · answered by .lyssa<3 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
behind the skull was a bright light .. jesus had come to save him
2007-01-03 11:24:00 · answer #5 · answered by xoooooooo 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
probably dont want to put that on the internet someone could steal your work and claim it as their own! be careful!
2007-01-03 11:38:39 · answer #6 · answered by Guitar*Girl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋