Will I grow up to be a famous writer?

Question

I love story-writing a lot,especially addictive romances between humans. Can anyone tell me,will I grow up to be a famous writer...after reading this story written by me?

Sheryl is a girl being mistreated by her step parents,dreaming of breaking free from her confined world one day. Ryan is the only son of a hotel tycoon. His father always hopes that he could take over the hotel legacy one day,however Ryan is an extreme introvert and are always on bad terms with his father. One day,Ryan runs away from home due to some conflicts with his father and starving outside without food for a few days. Finally,he fainted outside Sheryl's house. Just nice Sheryl came out to clear the trash and rescued him,brought him to her room secretly. Being in the same predicament,they soon fell in love together and agreed to escape one day. However,they were soon discovered while escaping and both jumped into the sea. Ryan was rescued by a mafia..... While Sheryl survived and continued to search for Ryan..

Continue from here :. One day,she finally saw Ryan on the streets with his gang and got to know that he had been rescued by the mafia who saw his potential to be an outstanding right hand man. Sheryl decided to disguise as a man and sneak into the gang as a newbie. Finally,she succeeded. During one gunfight with another gang,Ryan got injured and Sheryl stayed up whole night to treat his injuries,carelessly leaving behind her keychain which Ryan gave her. Ryan saw the keychain and suspected that the disguised Sheryl is the real Sheryl. Finally,she admitted to her own identity and they were finally reunited. They promised to finish one last task for the mafia before running away together. However,the last fight turned out to be more bloody than ever,Sheryl got shot by a gun while shielding Ryan from the bullet. During her last days,Ryan brought Sheryl to the beach and relived their past memories. Soon,Sheryl died with a smile in Ryan’s arms…..end.

Answer 1

Not enough development at all, even for a very short story. There is no main theme and when a decent writer writes, he or she writes for a reason.

I'm sure you can better develop your writing skills (grammar and such) with practice, but only with many courses in English, and writing composition. So, there is hope for you, as long as you learn how to develop characters, and situations.

You don't need to be so obvious, it seems extremely juvenile. Instead of saying "The boy was shy," put the boy in certain situations that portray him as someone who is quiet and keeps to himself. Don't say "he keeps to himself." Show it!

Your writing is jumpy. Finish one idea before you jump to the next. "Sheryl was this. Ryan was that." is not a good idea. Try explaining Sheryl's situation.. then Ryan's. Or whatever, but don't skip around like that.

There should always be meaning behind the words and a certain something "between the lines;" good writers don't write without a purpose. And to be a famous writer, you (almost) always need to be a DECENT writer.

So keep trying, and take as many creative writing and writing comp. courses as you can. You can improve. I don't know how old you are, but if you are a young-mid teen, or younger, there is definitely hope that you will become a BETTER writer. I don't know about being famous, but good luck to you anyway.

Answer 2

Keep at it.

The story is lacking in some details, and I know the space is restricted, so it's not possible to get into the important details.

Mafia? Who are they?

Big, bloated men in black suits with stiff collars, wearing concealed guns, traveling in blackened windowed automobiles by night. Streets all lonely and desolate, except for an occasional bark from a dog. Suddenly, a black sedan passes by, Ryan runs, they immediately appear, taking over the entire block. Where are the police? Run Ryan, run! Sheryl can be seen crouching in a corner, by somebody's border bush. They immediately make way for Sheryl...she flees, and in the still darkness of the night, they begin to open fire.

Houses immediately get lit up, all in sequence. People peering out of windows, scared to witness what is unfolding.

This is a mafia hit, and the bad guys rule the night!

Sheryl finds a ditch and hides, while Ryan flees the scene.

An hour later, all is still, and the lights begin to slowly go off as each home goes back to sleep...a silence pervades the stillness and Ryan and Sheryl are safe.

All is well, all is good, the bad guys only lost a few bullits.

Answer 3

the road on taken by robet frost The Road Not Taken TWO roads diverged in a yellow wood, And sorry I could not travel both And be one traveler, long I stood And looked down one as far as I could To where it bent in the undergrowth; 5 Then took the other, as just as fair, And having perhaps the better claim, Because it was grassy and wanted wear; Though as for that the passing there Had worn them really about the same, 10 And both that morning equally lay In leaves no step had trodden black. Oh, I kept the first for another day! Yet knowing how way leads on to way, I doubted if I should ever come back. 15 I shall be telling this with a sigh Somewhere ages and ages hence: Two roads diverged in a wood, and I— I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference. 20 this to me is talking about life and what we chose to do and were it may lead a person.

Answer 4

Nah, is not gonna happen. Looks like you are writing a quilt, picking up little pieces of other people's material. Ryan Hilton? The rich boy who ends up a hobo? Sounds like a bad soap opera or a cheesy Cindirella. Fainted outside the girl's house? How did he stay long in her step parents' for them to fall in love? Jumped into the sea? Rescued by a mafia? Think of the stuff you write about and picture it in your head, what are you tryingo to cover all the genres out there? Impossible love, mistreated daughter, rich boy loses everything, MAFIA???
Sorry but if you're gonna try to write and this is your material, you're gonna get a lot worse criticism than this, better get used to it.

Answer 5

it's good, but not that good. But then again, that's why there's editors around when you publish a book.

And for a writer to be famous is VERY difficult. I've read some books not so popular and the authors had your writing style. Yet they are writers, that's the good thing.

By the way, writing style is not so important. It is the IDEA in a writers mind. Look at JK Rowling, her writing is fifth grade stuff, yet her idea made her so famous.

Think about an idea which plenty of people love and many others will be interested in your writing.

Answer 6

It's an interesting story...You probably could become a writer. Your writing style is different than mine (I would like to become a writer as well) but it's not bad. I believe you can do any thing if you put all of your mind to it. But it depends on your fate. If fate wants u to be a writer then u will bcome one but if not then u could be something else. I'm not a gypsy or fortune teller but I do believe that everything happens for a reason. We once had a writer come to our school and at first everyone didnt thing he could do it and bookshops didnt want to take his books and all but then there was this book shop owner who felt sorry for him and got some books from him. then he's books became quite good sellers (not like Harry Potter but quite good) and he told us that if any of us wanted to be writers then "DONT GIVE UP!" i felt really really inspired. (The author was Christopher Milne). Anyway u probably could bcome a writer im not sure about the style and all but thats just me...just dont give up and keep on wrting!!!! Good luck!!!! :)

Answer 7

cut the sea and the mafia.

read rosie dunne. its like your story line except without the numerous twists. it was written by the prime minister of ireland's daughter.

if its an adventure, dont end with sheryl dying.

disguises are hot, but a keychain? hmmm how about......... he recognizes her from a scar that she got when they were doing something exciting, like......... skydiving, or scubadiving, or a cross between the two..

no. instead, since it ends with them on the beach, that should be where she gets the scar.......

but maybe you could take aspects of this one idea for a book, and write different books that each have their own moods.

like one book for romance

one book for adventure

one book for mystery

one more for a tragedy.

Answer 8

I hate raining on somebodies parade but this story is terrible,try reading a heap of good novels so you get an idea of how good writers word their stories and how they set up the plot/story,also because people are reading a story and cant see whats going on like in a movie you need to describe in more detail the scenery,characters,how the characters are feeling,the weather etc. good luck.

Answer 9

I like it, you have fantasy and this is how it's work getting a famous writer. People writing true stories or finding something. Just keep working. Remember the "Harry Potter" the lady she wrote all this books, she was so pure, now she is so rich. Good luck for you....

Answer 10

There is nothing impossible w/ God!.. If you know that you have the God`s given talent, you have to develop that.... Base on what i`ve read from what you have written, you should widen your imagination & add spice top it... be more creative & detailed.
Do not give up on your dreams! All the best to you!..:)