I wrote these lyrics and I was wondering if anyone could give me any tips on how to improve them here they are:
I will never forget
The way he looked at me
I remember it
like it was yesterday
I thought
what we had
was special
But I guess I was wrong
Yeah I was wrong
I ran into him at the store
He acted like I wasn't even there
I went to his door
He said he was leaving
But he didn't even say goodbye
and shut the door
I wish I could find you now
I could tell him
that I have changed
I wanna find you now
because i changed
I saw him today
He was at the store
I've changed I told him
He didn't even remember me
No he didn't remember me
I've found you now
I told you that i changed
I found you now
I have changed
(I have changed)
2007-01-02 17:59:11 · 9 answers · asked by roflcopter 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
keep working , and use chorus as, I wish i could find you now, repeat several times and break lyrics up more.
I will never forget
The way he looked at me
I remember it
like it was yesterday
I thought
what we had
was special
But I guess I was wrong
Yeah I was wrong
I wish i could find you now
to tell you that i've changed
I wish i could find you now
to tell you that i've changed
I wish i could find you now
to tell you that i've changed
I wish i could find you now
to tell you that i've changed
here a idea to maybe help you change if you want !
P.S. I wish i could find her now, i would tell her i love her and that i allways will...
I know, i feel your pain, great song, keep working ,good luck
2007-01-02 18:04:31 · answer #1 · answered by bri n 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sad. I can relate to the lyrics though with something I'm going through. I think your tone shouldn't be so negitive. It sounds like you're sending the message that you can't get over someone from a long time ago. Maybe it should focus more on you moving on after being hurt.
2007-01-03 02:04:29 · answer #2 · answered by micha 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the lyrics are good! however in my songs i try not to use word like store.. maybe you could change it to someplace that is more special..
2007-01-03 02:03:51 · answer #3 · answered by 4ever 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with changing the "store" part. but other than that they're good.
2007-01-03 02:11:40 · answer #4 · answered by experiMENTAL bunny 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Try "Readers Digest." They eat that stuff up. It sucks, BTW.
2007-01-03 02:01:39 · answer #5 · answered by RoninShonen 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
They are yours. Don't allow anyone to change them.
2007-01-03 02:01:28 · answer #6 · answered by Sory 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sorry - not my cup of tea
2007-01-03 02:00:45 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
so touching ... I like it
2007-01-03 02:03:32 · answer #8 · answered by ♥chicagurl♥ 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
they are good.
2007-01-03 02:01:11 · answer #9 · answered by scooprandell 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋