Would you forgive me
If I said I was sorry
I will love you so
Please forgive me
I'll say I'm sorry
Please forgive me
I'm so sorry
I ran into you just yesterday
I wish i could see you smile
Just one more time
I want you to know
I love you so
I'll never forget you
'cause I love you so
Please forgive me
I'm so sorry
Please forgive
I'll say I'm sorry
I ran into you just yesterday
I wish I could see you smile
Just one more time
You make my life complete
Because I love you so
2007-01-02 14:09:22 · 8 answers · asked by roflcopter 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
are any of your family member famous singers? cause these lyrics are rockin`! u must have spent a lot of time on these words. and I bet it'll even sound better with the tune!!
rock on, rock star =)
2007-01-02 14:13:55 · answer #1 · answered by ♥ qdgurrrl ♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, but I think they're sappy and silly. Don't take this personally, I have written many songs, but only about 1 in 20 is worth hearing. Keep your lyrics, even the worst ones. You may end up reworking them, or they may point you in a different direction. Also try taking the song apart phrase by phrase and rewording it. Find as many different ways to say the same thing that you can. Then move on to the next phrase. Good luck.
2007-01-02 22:43:53 · answer #2 · answered by Raul D 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As far as just lyrics, they're pretty good. Now you have to find a melody to put to the words.....otherwise, it's just poetry that's been said before by many others. Melody will make your choice of words have more impact. Here's an example:
"I was crying in my dreams last night
there were tears on my pillow
in the morning light
I don't think I can take the pain
Let me hold you once again
and I would gladly go blind
if I could see you....one more time."
As poetry goes, it's ok....BUT, put a melody to it and the song could tear your heart out.
2007-01-02 22:29:17 · answer #3 · answered by WhoMe 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
they're ok
they're kinda steriotypical, try to say that using metiphors, and poetic stuff, some stuff can sound stupid read aloud but sounds great in songs
try this, instead of:
"I ran into you just yesterday
I wish I could see you smile
Just one more time"
do something like:
yesterday's smile flew away, with our love so pure, so i will wait for the day, when you will take my tears, and hold me again
that's just a thought, it sound sorta sappy but atleast it's more poetic and flowing, i'm a musician myself, and often when writing you may think some ideas are a bit out there, but they end up being awesome
2007-01-02 22:25:52 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats cool I really like i, Could make you cry if you've just broke up with someone. I think with a good rhythm it could be a hit. Good Work
2007-01-02 22:15:28 · answer #5 · answered by L.Sincere 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
So many sorrys. Its nice, But I think you say I'm sorry too much.
Sorry lol
2007-01-02 22:43:34 · answer #6 · answered by MuZzZ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sing it to me baby, sounds like a wonderful song:)
2007-01-02 22:15:30 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
⥠the lyrics.....hopefully i could hear the song
2007-01-02 22:11:55 · answer #8 · answered by [♥] 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋