Your deep blues eyes drown me,
Your golden hair is the golden locket to my heart,
Your sweetness has me in way past my knees,
Although I didn't like you at first,
Well things have changed a whole lot,
The battle of my heart has been fought,
Then it was your face that I sought.
~To D.D.
2007-01-02 13:37:09 · 8 answers · asked by maysimay2006 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
not bad I like it and I always get freaked out when someone writes poems about me but that would make me go wow wanna let me show you how much I like ya
2007-01-02 13:42:04 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
To be honest, I seek a partner with a working brain. Not that you don't have one- I wouldn't know. However, this poorly structured and unoriginal poem doesn't offer any evidence to say that you do. In a nutshell- it needs work.
2007-01-03 12:13:11 · answer #2 · answered by Brento! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really beautiful and you should be proud of yourself. Did you use the poem on the one you wrote it for, and did it work?
2007-01-02 13:39:59 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm not big on people writing poetry for me. I think it's a bit cheesy, but, if that's your thing then yea.. it's probably ok.
2007-01-02 13:38:40 · answer #4 · answered by Jennifer F 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
1st corny
2nd don't put although i didnt like you at first- big no no/ turn off
3rd not very poetic
4th stop the rhyme, end rhyme is a turn off for me
2007-01-02 13:47:30 · answer #5 · answered by Michelangelo 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It starts of kind of flattering, and then kind of goes to a Wayne's World tone.
2007-01-02 13:45:48 · answer #6 · answered by Out on a limb returns 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
This poem would've touched me. ^_^
2007-01-02 13:48:00 · answer #7 · answered by kawaiisuzakuwarrior 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yes i would
its really good also, good job!!!
2007-01-02 13:41:54 · answer #8 · answered by * Miss Thang * 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋