Hey! I'm a 14 yr old who loves to write & am told I have a lot of talent.. I like getting comments on my writing..& this is one of those times! So, if u dont mind: can u read this & tell me what u think?
Sometimes, I get lost in your thoughts while the world around me continues doing their own thing...end up simply staring into space, thinking about where you are and who you are...I smile at nothing visible but at the thoughts of finding you and falling in love...I feel pretty stupid but I just can't help those times when I get stuck in your mysterious trance...&& then, there are those times- those moments...where out of no where...I feel as if you're getting closer and closer to me...I feel as if you're thinking about me...&& I finally get that assuring feeling of knowing that your trance isn't a lie, it's for real...Jaan, find me during this season of love && make me all yours, because I'm ready to fall in love- all into your arms.
(Jaan means my life/love in hindi)
Thankss!
2007-01-02 13:28:37 · 10 answers · asked by Lina 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
you are a truly amazing writer. your still young. but keep it up and good luck in everything you do!!
p.s. that poem/pharagraph was awesome!!!
2007-01-02 13:32:14 · answer #1 · answered by * Miss Thang * 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Stupid innocence on the subject of love,too many bollywood movies the begining to a love story the end is children ,cooking ,cleaning,extra weight a man who loves you but would still rather sit in front tv and notice when it's time to eat or for a quicky that he only gets to enjoy, but you are a good writer
2007-01-02 21:32:29 · answer #2 · answered by stargazer 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ignore criticism because everybody is a critic. Just like with actors who audition for acting jobs, writers too get tons of rejection letters from publishers for every one success.
Keep writing, study English sentence structure and composition techniques - I suggest this because there are relatively minor structural problems with your prose - nothing so egregious that I would suggest giving it up. On the contrary, keep at it.
Study how famous authors write - my favorite - Charles Dickens...his story telling technique is just awesome. So pick your favorites - poets, essayists, novelists....study how they write...how they weave a tapestry of words into a tale that draws you in, and won't let you leave.....
Best wishes......
2007-01-02 21:40:10 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very pretty and a great job of writing it.. who knows you may be the next Nora Roberts just keep on writing....
2007-01-02 21:33:06 · answer #4 · answered by Amy M 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww i think thats really cute & really good!
yeah i love writing too, but lately i don't have a lot of time. anyway, your a good writer :]
2007-01-02 21:33:08 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
beats 99 percent a the stuff that is on here. get it published.
2007-01-02 21:31:14 · answer #6 · answered by scooprandell 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is great keep up the good work
2007-01-02 21:31:23 · answer #7 · answered by webb 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad, not bad at toll
Happy 2007
2007-01-02 21:32:49 · answer #8 · answered by Shorty 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
oh ok cool
2007-01-02 21:29:56 · answer #9 · answered by EvenstarAngel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very good........keep up the goog work......
2007-01-02 22:45:52 · answer #10 · answered by greg 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋