People also regularly fail to notice editing errors in commercial movies, despite the intense scrutiny of movies during the production process.
How can I rewrite this??
2007-01-02 08:34:11 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
"In commercial movies, despite the intense scrutiny during production, editing errors often go unnoticed."
1. inversion of "in commercial movies" and "despite the intense scrutiny during production" is emphatic; it also eliminates the repetition of "movies" after "scrutiny" because the reader can infer you are referring to "scrutiny of movies";
2. economy of words: instead of saying "people ... regularly fail to notice editing errors" (7 words), you could simply say "editing errors often go unnoticed" (4 words); in addition, "people" should be omitted in order to avoid ambiguity (People who? The movie production staff or viewers?).
2007-01-02 11:52:55 · answer #1 · answered by Nice 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Despite the intense scrutiny commercial movies are under during the production process, people regularly fail to notice editing errors.
2007-01-02 16:44:56 · answer #2 · answered by Carlene Noel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Despite the intense scrutiny of movies during the production process, people also regularly fail to notice editing errors in commercial movies.
2007-01-02 16:41:44 · answer #3 · answered by Skyleigh's Mom :)™ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Despite the intense scrutiny of movies during the production process, editing errors still occur. However, people regularly fail to notice these errors in commercial movies.
At least, I think that's what you're trying to say.
2007-01-02 16:39:09 · answer #4 · answered by saintcady 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
People often fail to notice editing errors that appear in commercial movies despite intense scrutiny during production.
Production is a process, so production process is redundant.
2007-01-02 16:48:37 · answer #5 · answered by T P 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Your sentence is unclear to me...
Do you mean...
Despite the intense scrutiny of commercial movies, they still contain errors. Apparently, viewers fail to notice these errors when watching them.
2007-01-02 16:43:15 · answer #6 · answered by Lina 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋