What do you think of this poem?

Question

All the days all melt into one
No longer hold dreams up on the pedestal that I had begun with
Everything so idolized, I was not wise
Dreams are lost dreams are broken, dreams are realized to be never open
A child’s hope that you let go once you learn that the world isn’t so

And I no longer have dreams; have dreams like I used to have
And I no longer feel the endless hope I once used to trust
I feel nothing but empty
Nothing but pain

And I think deep inside I don’t want to be saved
Maybe that’s why I run away
I wish I could be happy
I wish I could feel
Feel more than this pain that dries my heart out still

And it’s nothing but empty
So how can it hurt?
I guess that’s just the irony of apathy
And no, I no longer wish to be heard.

Answer 1

since you asked...first of all i always say keep on writing..practice makes everyone better at whatever they do

i understand the sentiment you are trying to portray in this poem..but i don't feel the anguish that you are trying to vocalize..it's more trite than deep..you could use a more diverse vocabulary to express yourself

Answer 2

Beautiful!!!!!

Answer 3

It fits your name

Answer 4

Oh it is just marvelous!

Answer 5

Good stuff.