We call ourselves best friends,
And thought forever it would be,
No one believed we were close
We’re so different you see,
Forgot looks, personality and taste,
And ignored what they said,
We talked about other things,
Like boys and the books we read,
But one day she told me,
Something I thought she’d never say,
It concerned someone I cared about,
Since then we drifted apart each day,,
We’ve had so many arguments,
Sometimes every hour,
And then the things that never mattered then,
Showed us who we really are,
We still hang out together,
But she drives me insane,
Then I begin to wonder,
That each other’s company is in vain,
The only people who know about this
Is me and my so called friend,
And now I sometimes feel,
That our friendship is going to end.
i'm 13 years old..
2007-01-02 00:15:40 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Wow, very impressive! I like it a lot! I would've thought you were in college, not 13.
2007-01-02 01:28:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honest opinion? It's baaad...BUT the good news is that not many 13 year olds can write a poem that isn't a pathetic glob of trype that needs to be burned right away. Baaad is much better than that. This means that you've got potential. Write all of the time, every day. If you start producing something that almost seems too good to have come from you, then you have it. Takes years of practice. Try to speak in a language as foreign from your own as possible. I don't mean Japanese. I mean use verbs and descriptives that you wouldn't normally use to describe something, but make them work anyway. And remember, poetry is not limited to words that rhyme, just words that have power.
2007-01-03 20:24:54 · answer #2 · answered by Brento! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're 13? That's amazing! A little bit depressing for someone of your age though!
2007-01-02 08:18:56 · answer #3 · answered by shorty 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
R u really 13 yrs old? i love your poem. u could give it to some magazine or newspaper for publishing. u r really talented.
2007-01-02 09:39:53 · answer #4 · answered by butterfly_asd 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey, great job on the poem!
Mind the grammar, punctuation (it's easier if you don't use them at all) and as tacky as it sounds, practice makes perfect!
2007-01-02 08:34:45 · answer #5 · answered by xxon_23 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like you're hurting, and you expressed that in the poem, so I'd say it's good enough.
2007-01-02 08:23:24 · answer #6 · answered by redhatgirl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's really quite good. I like the ebb and flow of they rhyme scheme.
2007-01-02 09:01:02 · answer #7 · answered by cudancegirl1 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow !! that was great ! yr only 13 !!! im older and i cant even get thro the 1st line . u got ambition . good luck
2007-01-02 08:20:55 · answer #8 · answered by Bri-anna 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes
2007-01-02 08:20:04 · answer #9 · answered by vahn f 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wonderful poem, well articulated and very mature for your age.
2007-01-02 08:19:52 · answer #10 · answered by ponitail 55 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋