This is for you, Baby
My poor, lonely heart is so broken
Everyday no matter I do, I feel so sad.
We lost all communication
I just long for you so bad.
There's not one day I go without thinking of you
A lot of songs, especially love songs now make me cry.
I would love to see you again
But this time I never want to say, Goodbye.
I can't help but stare so long
At people who look and remind me of you.
Even when I have flashbacks, dreams, or even daydreams
I feel really disappointed 'cause I want them all to be true.
I love you so much
And I know you already know that.
Every time when I send you letters
I wait anxiously by the mail to get a respond back.
Sometimes I fear the worse of the worse
That you're out there in danger or probably even dead.
I know you believe in the lord
So if He ever decides to take you, I want to be taken instead.
2007-01-01 17:08:37 · 8 answers · asked by Shorty 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
no. it sucks. sorry.
2007-01-01 17:16:32 · answer #1 · answered by 星戦争は最もよい 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Heartfelt but crude. Re-write it in the 3rd person and see what it sounds like.
2007-01-01 18:59:36 · answer #2 · answered by Lorenzo Steed 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
sensational-wanna die 4 me?
just a little amendments gonna be da best
2007-01-01 19:26:59 · answer #3 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't like poetry, but if it makes you feel better to write it then I support your effort.
2007-01-01 17:11:47 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Its not a very well written poem.
2007-01-03 12:08:06 · answer #5 · answered by ♫ giD∑■η ♫ 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's awful.
2007-01-02 00:41:02 · answer #6 · answered by redhatgirl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great job!!!!
2007-01-01 17:19:56 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
great............................ very emotional ............................ i feel like crying ................................... geat !!!
2007-01-01 17:19:47 · answer #8 · answered by get2rohan_365 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋