imagine your self sitting on a soft blanket out in a lush feild. the black night sky is overflowing with tiny white lights known as stars. they twinkle and tease your eyes with the constellations they create. but out of the corner of your eye, you see a round fiery speck, known more commonly as a comet flying straight across the sky. its got a long tail and it seems to beg for a wish. you blink a couple of times, to make sure that your not insane. then its halfway gone. you try to think of a wish for superstition, in hopes it might come true. but its to late, the moment passed you by. "oh well", you think. its only a star streaming by right? "who was i kidding?". as the comet is orbiting to elsewhere, its got a problem of its own. . .
This is a poem i read from a really cool person, do you think you could add more or is it just fine... I think its great tho
2007-01-01 10:17:45 · 4 answers · asked by See ya later aligator 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
no.... its beautiful in its own rite.
2007-01-01 11:06:37 · answer #1 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its great the way it is lol you might want a spell check tho
2007-01-01 18:26:09 · answer #2 · answered by meadow 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Leave it, its fine :-)
2007-01-01 18:25:44 · answer #3 · answered by Just Thinking 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
leave it, it was GREAT!!!!
2007-01-01 19:00:54 · answer #4 · answered by :] Got me goin crazy<33 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋